Review Detail of SauceMaster64 in I Just Want Peace

Writing quality you need to work on. Other than the second chapter, you need some other clinchers. Otherwise you're gonna lose a lot of attention just from the first chapters. Like me. I lost interest since it was kind of turning into a slice of life. You can turn it into a slice of life later on, when the readers get attached to your characters that they don't care what they're doing. For now, I don't see anything interesting. Good story though 👍