This story feels lighthearted and has funny moments. The world seems vast and has much to be explored. The only minus is the language but it's normal on WN. Among the problems are tense shifting (present and past). Perhaps getting better editors would help. Keep writing and read more formally published English books. This could help improve your writing. Keep it up!
Yohanlie
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