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    Despite a few grammatical errors, I strongly believe the writing in this story is unmatched. It is incredibly creative, even though it contains numerous references to anime. Creativity can be defined in many ways, and personally, I believe references are perfectly fine. Some might consider them a gimmick, but back in school, we all had to use other works to enhance our own. I like the story and can see a lot of potential. The author is clearly dedicated, but the sporadic release schedule slightly diminishes its impact. Occasionally, the narrative lacks clarity or feels like a run-on chapter. However, the passion in the writing is evident. Clarity in certain situations, like in chapters 8-11, could be improved. I found the sudden character swapping and the shifts in perspective between past, present, and future a bit confusing at first. Additionally, the stat point multiplier issue, where 1.3 is mentioned but considered as 0.3, should be corrected to avoid confusion. Tracking HP during the fight between Dust and Dimoultion was extremely confusing. Please consider using sub-notes below to indicate the remaining health points or stop using raw numbers in favor of percentages. The world background development is also something I hope to see as the story progresses. Since we are only at chapter 14, it's hard to give a full review, but it isn't something that can be rated highly yet. At some point, we will need to delve deeper into the story's world. Characters are introduced in a unique way, but it can be hard to follow at times. It's also challenging to become attached to them, except for the main character, because we don't really know much about them. Even Dust remains largely vague. I will also be looking forward to seeing the classes get more fleshed out and the abilities explained as we go. I remind the author not to bite off more than they can chew. It seems they definitely have a lot to work with, but if that's so, I'd remind the author to take care of the things preventing consistent uploads so that they can get back to pumping chapters out. Overall, I enjoyed the read and am excited for future chapters. I strongly believe in the author's ability to continue producing great chapters with comical moments and depth in the dungeon explorations. I hope to see more dungeons and the demon clans explored further, perhaps with chapters on their eliminations and dungeon failures as well.

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