"What was I expecting? Ugh",She soliloquized, face palming herself and rolling her eyes. He's like the hottest guy in school! I can't let my guard down and become delusional over him." She sighed and walked away.
okay this made me laugh. totally didnt sound creepy saying that
"Who is that brunette standing alone there? She seemed lonely, and I love lonely girls", one of the twins said, sitting At a far distance from where Nancy was.
overall great prologue and great story building steady characters and reasonable direction. the names threw me off at first but got used to them and overall great story so far and great writing i see nothing wrong. good job