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The story is actually good, but it has some problems, like some words are repeated over and over again,the Roman legions are practically similar to the Milanese knights and still have difficulty facing enemies and another example is the navy that despite using frigates, Man-O-Wars and ships with steel plate, still uses rowers which is useless, since it does not want to use cannons because it is too early, could a of the caravels, which do not need rowers and do not use any steam engine if that is the case.

Good story, I'm enjoying how the story is going and an addendum since the navy has frigates, could it use caravels in the future? And another thing, Marcus should make some edict after the Unification of Italy under the control of Rome, is to encourage the birth rate to increase the population (since he will not use the auxiliaries). With this, in addition to having a strong army, it would have a gigantic number of reservists that could be used in the war against future enemies such as the Gauls, Illyrians, Dacians, Thracians and Carthaginians.

Good story, keep it up.

Damn Vegeta! He let Cell absorb me to betray humanity!

Bom, sua história é boa e foge dos clichês das histórias desse site de Dragon ball e é legal tem um brasileiro por aqui escrevendo essa fanfic.

I thought it was cool to use Turles as the first villain coming from space, so when Goku appears, Master Shen's students will know how to deal with the Saiyans in the future.

History is moving in the right direction, creating a formidable force to protect Earth. At this point, it wouldn't make sense for Shen to become smarter than Dr. Briefs and Dr. Gero, it would be somewhat illogical for a three-hundred-year-old warrior to mysteriously become more intelligent than the two of them, in less than a few years.So, if you're going to make him intelligent, make him create something that doesn't exist like the Smartphone (something that only came to exist in the Dragon Ball Super manga) and not other types of inventions from others universes, for example the Arc Reactor from the Marvel comics.And another example of what to do is to make the scouters something different from the original, like when Vegeta arrived on Earth he had 18,000 PDL, but instead of being that it should say the type of threat like level as Urban (between five and fifty), Global (between fifty and one thousand), Planetary (between one thousand and one billion), Solar (between one billion and one hundred billion) Universal (from one hundred billion and above).But until then, if you want to make him intelligent, make him during these years, in addition to focusing on training, have some area of science that he will learn, so it will become a little more credible for the other scientists like Dr. Briefs, that Shen, in addition to being a master of martial arts, is a scientist, something that would make Shen a kind of philosopher King of Ancient Greece, in the World of Dragon Ball.If you do, build it up slowly since the events of Dragon Ball haven't started yet, so it would give him time to become intelligent without creating something that ends the Dragon Ball canon.

This story is cool, it's very different and uses a forgotten character from the Dragon Ball franchise (Master Shen) and I'm honestly enjoying the story, keep it up.

É isso aí!