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Nothing can terrify this man, except... Cookies...
Hmmmmmmmm...
First here! Haha, but anyways, this novel may be a bit confusing at the beginning but isn't every novel? Bear with the author through this novel! Maybe it's a hidden gem... Let me say, that when I first saw it, the novel was a bit confusing. With the rapids and things like that, I found myself growing more and more confused. But I believe ink will clarify all the information in the future.
No need to read this unless you wanna know about her!
"Why do I bother with this, it's not like I'll truly use this weapon..." "Ray." "Yes?" "Why do you speak like this? It's not like they'll ever truly hear." "I know." "Then please, don't. There's no point in regretting the past that has already been committed." "Yes." "..." "..." "Ray, I heard that you knew of my daughter." "Ah, her?" "Yes, her. Why don't you tell me about her instead?" "Well, what can I say? We never really met, did we?" "Yet you still knew she existed, even if in a different timeline." "..." "It's impossible to hide every fact about the one you love, Raymond Valtere... She's still my daughter" "... I don't deserve her, and I never will." "..." "I loved her, truly." "I never took you for a romantic person." "..." "Carry on." "She was a reincarnator." "!" "I personally lived through a few of her lives, and the rest she told me. Of course, that was through the visions The Overseer kindly showed me." "The Overseer..." "One of the ones he showed me, was a confession. Surprisingly, I was the one who confessed." "It's fine, you don't need to tell me this if it's personal." "Oh, no. You'll listen, since you asked." "..." "It was a truly emotional scene, she asked whether I loved her, and I replied yes. I repeated the same phrase over and over again. 'I love you'." "You truly loved her, and, I believe you deserve to love her." "Huh... Well, atleast I'll have some form of comfort within this timeline."
Overall, its a great story. I like the context and at the start the MC is really fleshed out. A bullied coward who's weak and, although he doesn't have the lingering attachments that I'd like to see, he's a good character nonetheless. However, as you go further on in the story, Gustav changes and becomes like almost every other MC. I don't really enjoy the change since I'd rather see him be as cynical as he used to be a person with trust issues and things like that. Its also easy to notice that the Author is losing his ideas and stretching the story out too far. The quality is fine, but everything is becoming 2D. The Author revealed the answers instead of slowly showing it bit by bit and Gustav is becoming naive. With Miss Aimee, you can tell the Author wanted to stop the clichee of some old geezer being super powerful and teaching the MC so they made the 'old geezer' a young woman. More evidence is shown when the Author does a vote asking whether Gustav should abandon Angy by "impregnating Miss Aimee". Also, rather than continuing the story slowly, its better to speed it up slightly. Ignoring the last sentence though, Endric. He's a cocky brat who can't handle the idea of Gustav being stronger than him and I liked that! It gave him the potential to either be the best antagonist or to have a really good redemption arc. Then he goes and gets beaten up by a teacher and then he suddenly likes Gustav? And now he acts like a robotic, pious believer of Gustav? Unbelievable. I would've liked seeing him be broken down bit by bit by either different people he knew or people he cared for. Then I'd like seeing him understand everything from Gustav's pov. He became really shallow and I don't like that potential being wasted like this. A similar example to how this could've been better is this, a book I love, Level Up Legacy. Oren and Arthur share a similar relationship but it only serves to show how irreversible their relationship is as Arthur took the mantle of being the 'father'. And it even deepens it by some statements that Arthur said, he said that he didn't like being near worshipped by Oren and therefore, he made Oren leave. I want to see something similar where Endric will disagree with Gustav or where they need to separate for some reason. Sorry for the paragraph!
This is only for some, there's no actual need to read this mini chapter within the comments! Haha...
Ah, wow... You don't need to read through this?
"Can I trust myself not to?"
In my opinion, this is a great novel with many different characters. Cause as you go on, the MC meets different people with different personalities and that's what I love about it. You never see the same people every time and its honestly a breath of fresh air, especially after seeing how he grows and develops as the story goes on. Even if he's frustrating at the beginning, he grows and eventually we get to see a child grow up. Although, I'm still waiting on him to reach Astra-rank, Author.
"What is happiness?"