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UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porCh 66 Chapter 63: (R:18) Amelia and Severus second part- UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porCh 12 Lelemar!
- UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porCh 52 Chapter 50: Vicious Slytherins
- UnwaveringFist1yrrespondió a Dethpool_Mlg
Correct, but that would be just building their graves a second time, I explained early on the first chapters why this whole middle side of the force is wrong and it can be summarized as the light side already being balance, while any imbalance is the dark side. George Lucas' words.
They would become similar to Grey Jedi themselves. - UnwaveringFist1yrrespondió a Anubis_9876Ch 5 Five - The thousand techniques shinobi, Hatake Kakashi 1
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Jiraiya is a little bit more handsome in my headcanon. Cheers!
In the land of Whirpools, a man with long and bright white hair was looking over the horizon from the top of a mountain. - UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porNaruto was smiling foolishly, I could see that grin from a mile away even without getting inside the classroom.
- UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porNeither Mizuki nor Iruka did anything or stop the match. Looking upwards, they could both see a crowd of thirteen Jonins watching everything from the ceiling of the Hokage's office. This wasn't a simple assessment, after all, they had all been choosing the kids for a few months now.
- UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porEven Sasuke couldn't help but focus more on this fight. His whole life he had heard about the Byakugan from his deceased family, but he never had the opportunity to fight against it. The reason why the Hyuuga and the Uchiha were recognized as the noblest clans of Konoha was because of this powerful bloodline limit.
- UnwaveringFist1yrComentado porApproaching the academy, we could already see the students flocking inside. The people in our class were already getting inside the classroom building, and I managed to spot Naruto on the swing below the tree next to the entrance.
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Sorry, but I'm not sure how girls refer to their friends in English, should I have written just 'friends' or 'female friends'?
"Here you go, sweetie." My mother helped place them inside my backpack as she gave me a plate with breakfast. Giving me a stare, she started giggling and asked with a teasing tone. "Say, it's been almost a year and I never bothered as much. I thought you were doing it for one of your girlfriends, but that doesn't seem to be the case. When were you going to tell me that you had a boyfriend?" - UnwaveringFist1yrComentado por
As part of something I feel helps to visualize the story, I'll be adding a picture to every chapter, somewhat like Light Novels do, hoping they help you guys better understand the scenes you are seeing. So here goes Sakura's appearance in this specific chapter.
... - UnwaveringFist1yrrespondió a HiTherefic
Not a major, just "too much of a plot hole." Years is too much time for him to have not levelled up a skill protecting his mind to a very high level so in my understanding he should be near immune if immune to mental traumas and adverse psychological effects steming from his life experiences. That's my take on systems anyway. I don't like when the situation doesn't match how its abilities were portrayed.
I decided to skip most of his time at war and only come back to it in flashbacks when he is remembering someone, or having a PTSD attack. - UnwaveringFist1yrrespondió a Dominic_Zibuda
I don't know a single person in my family or my ancestors that got skin cancer and we were mostly farmers till a hundred years ago.
"So the sun gives me 0.33 EXP per day. In that case, staying under it for 333 days would fill my EXP bar and level me up." Roy calmed down. Staying under the sun to level up was a stupid idea, but it was the safest way to do so. - UnwaveringFist1yrComentado por
Sorry, but I've decided to drop. It's not a bad story but this point here is way too much of a plot hole given what you already showed your system to be capable of. I can't see any situation where he wouldn't have a skill to protect his mental faculties after years Facing this exact type of problem. Good luck, and I hope you can improve your writing in your next chapters/fics/original works.
I decided to skip most of his time at war and only come back to it in flashbacks when he is remembering someone, or having a PTSD attack. - UnwaveringFist1yrComentado por
I really hope this doesn't happen. The worst mistake any author can make is revealing the origins of his powers. Doesn't matter if it's a system novel, magic novel, etc. If it's anything especial, it shouldn't be revealed in any circumstances.
Though I didn't lie to her, I gave her some truths that had some blanks. I trusted her with my life now but right now was not the time to reveal the real origin of Toxin. And even Toxin himself, though he liked Caitlin as well, was hesitating to tell everything to her. So I answered "I don't know" to some. - UnwaveringFist1yrrespondió a Kw0z
C'mon guys, what's wrong with being an emo? My best buddy is one and he's just like anyone else.
Life with Joe was good. Barry slowly but surely got over our mom's death. And I guess Iris helped with that. Since he had a huge crush on her, the fact that she would console us would have a much better effect on him. Me, I was fine but I wasn't and Joe took notice of that. Slowly, I would turn expressionless and keep a straight face. I would have a monotone voice. - UnwaveringFist1yrrespondió a Haise_Sasaki1Ch 5 Chapter 5