Ima be unbiased here the story is pretty good at the beginning but he later brings religion and race into it which is a huge turn off and he sometimes brings up stuff that honestly don’t make any sense. The grammars good but he’s trying to hard with the race aspect.

Firstly Islamic decent isn’t a thing as it’s a religion not a race. I think you meant arab and even if they where how would everyone just happen to randomly know they where Muslim? Ye it just seems so random and outa pocket to bring up religion in this moment especially after the MC decided the Muslims where perfectly fit for the bombing cuz if he saw them as all equally then he woulda killed them equally btw this just seems like a lame attempt at being racist as an author do better.

You should remove the name allah because you are disrespecting my religion, and for you to assume that person who told you to take of the name is a religious extremist and that he doesn’t know English is extremely disgusting. You probably didn’t know so it’s fine but could you please change it. And it wouldn’t hurt if your a bit more kind would it? 😉

Sacrifice for the almighty Shrek hahahahaha

Pop quiz what position did Michael have in the Normandy invasion based on the hints in the story.

Author here I honestly think it’ cringe and pretty bad, but I’l still give myself some extra brownie points for effort. Word count