Late on your first day..not a good way to start. At least someone else is off dreaming of her! Even if she doesn't;t know it of course. Kind of slow-paced but not an issue solid 6/10

I don't know how but I doubt that

The plot thickens! We got to see Scarlett be a paramedic and save some guy on the street. Unfortunately, it killed someone else inadvertedly...no problem he was probably bad anyway. Also, new bad evil guys who kill their subordinates over nothing are always fun! 7/10

So much for the tough guy act...[img=faceslap]

Can't argue with that one chief...

Scarlett is really toeing the line, isn't she? Lotta build up here but that's not a bad thing it just gives us something to look forward to. 7/10

Scarlett's a pretty good liar, isn't she?

I think this is a really good chapter! This is where Scarlett is beginning to make some major changes to the plot and it's gonna really cool to see how the other characters react. Also, I really like Richards Character so there's that too. Solid 8/10

Scarlett's ducking up the plot already lol

My sister doesn't listen to me so I dunno what he expected

To think a battle is less distressing than getting scolded

Alrighty, this chapter picked up the momentum! We got some pretty good character work in this one and I'm invested in this new revenge plot we're getting. It's always refreshing to go through multiple character's POVs so kudos! Also, the jump from a serene mansion to a chaotic battle was pretty nice too so I thought I'd say it. Easy 8/10

Impactful! Characters motivated by revenge are always interesting especially when written well. So far you've done a pretty good job establishing characters and their motivations.

I don't think now is the time to be worrying about some pancakes...

Same with this. Short, sweet, essential.

You see this is better! Its an info dump sure but it's so short it doesn't take us out the story like the last ones did!

Tl;dr: Cool it with the massive lore dumps and integrate it into the story using characters and not these weird 'sticky notes' you've been pasting everywhere. Hmmm...Chapter Three is where things get interesting. We learn a lot about the world in one chapter and there are three main problems that I felt with this. Number one is that it was all done in one massive info dump which takes me out of the experience and bogs the story down. Two one of the best things to remember when adding lore or info to a story is that you should wait for the info to become immediately relevant because when you don't it's entirely possible we might forget it really soon. Granted I haven't read chapter four so I don't know when this comes into play but the point stands. Lastly, number one and number two could have literally never existed if you went with the solution you immediately use after and just have all this information given to us through the story from Scarlett's point of view. When you give us the lore through a character we not only care about it more by pure virtue of caring about Scarlett but it also doesn't bog the story down in massive exposition that takes from the story because Scarlett IS A PART OF THE STORY. Sorry for the essay but had to get it out there. All in all, I'm giving this a solid 5/10. Cool it with the Lore dumps.

This and below is what I talk about in the final review. Less of this data book nonesense

Chapter two was a pleasant surprise. Where many stories would have failed to seamlessly merge a character between two worlds it is done pretty well here! I also noticed that the style of writing has changed up a bit since we are in the book now and I think that it's a nice touch. My only gripe with this chapter is that I didn't get as invested in Belinda and the rest of the staff as much as did Scarlett and her foster family but that's more of a personal preference. Overall I think Chapter Two has earned a 6/10 but don't think I'm calling this a downgrade in quality!

Rich people's problems. Needing three outfits for a single day #CANTRELATE