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Mah_olliva

Mah_olliva

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2021-08-01 Se unióGlobal
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  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva10 hours ago
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    At the moment, considering the size of Alexandria, it is more worth convincing them to join the main group than establishing trade with them, Alexandria needs manpower to face what is to come (wolves, saviors, whisperers, crm etc) I never understood in the series that they kept the communities separate instead of merging, this only left them vulnerable, so much so that the hilltop fell and the Kingdom was abandoned due to structural damage

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva4 days ago
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    This is easily one of the best fanfics I’ve read on this site. The dialogue feels natural, the interactions between the characters flow effortlessly, and the drama is placed just right never feeling repetitive or overdone. The writing itself is excellent; the author clearly has a great command of storytelling. If I have one complaint, it would be the update schedule, but considering the level of detail especially in the surgery scenes it’s completely understandable why each chapter takes time to come out. As for the criticism that the MC doesn’t change much in the story and is just an “observer,” I think that’s actually part of his character development. In the beginning, he’s still figuring out how to live a normal life after his past traumas, but as the chapters go on, you can see him slowly opening up and making decisions that actively alter the original storyline. And I have to mention the romance it’s beautifully written. It doesn’t feel forced or rushed, and the emotional buildup makes it incredibly satisfying to read. The way the characters connect feels so real, which makes every moment between them even more meaningful.

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_ollivaa month ago
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    I was curious about your friend's story about fallout, what's the name of ff?

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva2 months ago
    respondió a amoeba12696260

    crossover? from which universe? I don't recognize it

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva2 months ago
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    Dude, at least try to make it at least believable that a 6-month-old baby is talking and wanting to see politics? No parents are freaking out? No scientists want to study this case, at least special.

    Este libro ha sido eliminado.
  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva3 months ago
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    Can he set up online game simulations? I mean, even if it's for low-level hunters, it'll be good. Each game is different, with new strategies and adapting to the enemy. The question is, does he make changes to the games? Or does he literally just copy and not change/improve the games? Besides, it's worth exploring famous low-level franchises.

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva3 months ago
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    I'm enjoying it, so I recommend that you reevaluate the structure of the texts, it's a bit confusing and the reader gets lost very easily, especially in what is spoken or thought. It's worth seeing how the structure of some works is put together as a reference. Thanks for the chapter, looking forward to more.

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva3 months ago
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    Thanks for the chapter, looking forward to the next chapters

  • Mah_olliva
    Mah_olliva3 months ago
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    TFTC