Pretty good for a first time writer. Although there are flaws here and there, no contradictions present. Keep it up.
Oh, by the way since you asked for it in your novel BEST OF LUCK!!!
Star Spirit Continent: A Reborn Assassin's Journey
Laughing families and screeching kids roamed the streets, happy and carefree. At first glance, it would seem that the people were happy with whoever was in command of this Kingdom.