BlackJester

It's a great story, everything is perfect here, starting from writing characters and keeping a story[img=Your move][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

Eh, the author, you ruined the story at the very beginning, did you see a one-year-old child?Then you should think about your own stories, it looks like the same child wrote them.No matter how different the world is, the child remains a child, and will not be able to think, talk and walk on his own.If you didn't know yourself, then it was worth listening to the commentators and editing

And so he became a slave to the system, fearing to become a slave to Danzo

to make the op weaker than others, although unlike them, you train and have experience from a previous life, yes why not, let the op get in the face from the nouname in the first sparring

he hides too much, so much that it won't make sense, because I'm sure that in academies he will hide his abilities, which means that he will be mediocre in the eyes of others, which means there will be no point in pouring resources into him in the eyes of others

что Кишимото,что и вы на стороне Саске)

of course, the comparison is not very good, as one commentator noted before that , remember the moments with the transformation of Gamabunta into a 9 -tailed fox, or the transformation of Naruto himself into Akamaru, and you should not try to explain the technique of the world, it is very stupid

they gave him the power with which to make a hero with a gray morality, but spoiled him by making him a sissy, it made sense to give him a weapon with which to kill a person, and even he was happy about it, but now he behaves like a typical anime protagonist

Why is your main character acting like a little girl?He is a man with experience from a previous life, and who was reborn in a world of complete danger (he initially knew about this, and knew that he would not be able to live in peace in this world).A man he doesn't know has died, so what?So many people are dying in our world at the moment, but no one cares, but for some reason you decided that a person who lives a second life should be sentimental, although according to the description of his past life he is an adult man with a steely character, and not a pussy

Too many thoughts, it gets boring