Trojan_HeartVirus

THE REVIEWS LIES AND THEY MUST BE BOTS! Whoever the translator is, he did a terrible job, it's more unreadable than Mtl. I could barely read one chapter and I got a headache.

It must be because he became a magician. There's no way you can manipulate magic without being able to feel it.

I couldn't get past the first chapter, it gave me a headache. The narrative is very poor and illogical, as if the author were patching up the same piece over and over again in a frustrated attempt to camouflage a huge hole with poorly made seams. Not to mention that the dialogues are pure garbage juice. I think that if a story starts out full of inconsistencies like this, the best thing to do is not to create expectations that it will improve over time, we all know that it won't.

Who speaks qualitatively in a conversation? Did the character come from China? I'm feeling vibes of that right now.

It's really bad, I'm trying to read this, but I can't. I know it's a translation, but it still sounds like RAW. The story has a lazy narrative where everything is told directly and nothing is shown to us, the dialogues are weird. Not to mention that if Laila was replaced by a male character, it wouldn't make any difference.

But the new thing about this fanfic is that the MC is an old bastard, there are a zillion copies of fanfics with normal MC out there.

Okay, I don't like Maria at all. She's so... troubled and unseasoned. I can't find any quality that makes her interesting and it's quite irritating that she's a source of problems every time she appears on the scene. Maybe I'm being too partial to her, I know she's still young, but Ricky is more than twice her age, maybe even triple her age and he's being led by the nose by a little girl who's just been weaned. I can't imagine Ricky being so patient and affectionate with an immature, basic girl who can barely choose a side of the coin, especially since he doesn't seem like a good guy. I wonder what is so fascinating about her that a lively guy like him would be so obsessed with her and please don't tell me it's because of her purity. Furthermore, for someone who was born into a mafia family, she doesn't have the slightest bit of decorum and is a bit autistic, in families like that, it's full of strict rules and women are obviously created for future alliances, anyway, she should at least have a little social intelligence to at least understand that interfering in other people's fights is stupid.

Seriously, I'm very impressed, although Ricky is quite annoying, he has a high chance of having the best and most well-done character design development on this site, the secondary characters also manage to bring that feeling of reality, although I believe that their descriptions are a little too shallow and direct, which breaks my immersion and makes me have some difficulty materializing and remembering what they should look like physically. The lemons are also very good, but I think to avoid getting repetitive in the future you could skip some scenes with partners who already had Ricky's babies.

OK, Alaine is disgusting. .

TFC