Adalwolf_k
Just a new author, doing it for fun, always looking for what I can improve on. We'll see where this journey takes me.
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I think so too, but I'm fairly new to writing, and at the moment of writing this part, and how he addressed him seemed correct. Writing conversations is not my strong point.
Thanks for the feedback, I see where you are coming from. I just did this with the purpose of setting up some things I had planned for how I want the story to develop in the future. And what I thought of why he turns them so easily is because what he wants is not only him and does around him being Lycans, but to revive the Lycan as the stories told in his old life. So in the future, he will turn other families than MC deemed worthy.
Yes, but he will before it all starts he will already have some more experience and strength.
He is still young and has a lot to learn, it was an enclosed place and he could not use his true self to the full of its potential. And he will get stronger as gets older.
I plan on making him grow stronger as the story progress, I don't want him to be invincible from the start.
that the longer that Hodor stays in the pack, the stronger he will become. And also his loyalty, thanks to the link, is way higher.
Also, I don't want the mc to be paranoid about everyone. he may have a horrible past life, but he is trying to live this life as free and unrestrained as he can.
I am thinking of changing it that way.
I see the link as a way to know when they are not being loyal to him, as if they are not close to him or started to doubt him constantly, the link will weaken and he will notice.
Well, I knew that, but it seemed a little too complicated to explain it like that, so I decided to just go with what I wrote. but thanks for the observation.
I just saw it as a better way to get closer to the starks before he returned. But I can see where you're coming from.
In the past life, the Lycans were repressed for a long time, and their power couldn't compare with what he is developing in this new life. The height of 15 years was on his human form, and with only getting his true self, it still was not as developed as it should be.