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i have not responded to things on here is a very long time, but ayo 🤣
my bad pimp didn't realize you've started rewriting chapters keep up the good work
honestly it's surprisingly good I enjoy the dark, but loving Naruto. I would highly recommend proof reading or getting a beta tho other then that keep up the good work 👍
yeah I'ma keep it 100 with absolutely anyone who tries this story. there are a ungodly amount of unneeded comments from the author within the story, grammar mistakes, and overall cringe. I'm not trying to diss you, but get rid of the extra comments, and emojis, use grammarly, and it might be a okay story, not good simply okay. once again not trying to diss it's just painful to read the interactions between characters is sub par, and the actual story itself is purely wish fulfillment which I'm fine with if not for the fact that you went about it the wrong way there's no buildup, or anything. there are ways to make a good wish fulfillment, but you leave much to be desired hell just read Madara in the avatar world perfect example of essentially a perfect wish fulfillment in a way tho it may be unfair to be comparing to that author considering how impeccable they are in writing.
I'll put it this way first 17 chapters kinda okay, but cringey past that phenomenal keep up the good work mate..............................
I strongly agree with this statement still
keep it up my man's im loving it
another good chapter mate I look forward to more in the future
I think its genuinely solid so far good grammar, and funny enough I shall follow this .....................................................
I'm well aware of this, but you did not disagree with the image therefore I felt the need to ask, and you also technically didn't give an answer there either I do already know that they're not female in this because I've read further