Gabriel_Cabral

It's a pretty good story, even if it contains a bit of wish-fulfillment, but it turned out pretty well. I think it's unfair to have low stars so I leave my stars to the author.

the author should create "npc's" with creation and production classes (ex: alchemist, blacksmith and if there is a herbologist (farmer)).

wow, the same author who said he would make a realistic story, makes a totally unrealistic development of this one, never that Mei would be friends with jiraya or anything, because they are from enemy villages and after what happened, apart from that it took her even to care about their team members, hence super forced development. apart from the unrealistic improvements of konohan characters, if all it took to improve was the pressure of someone strong then jonin and kage would be like cabbage. author seems to like konohan a lot

this story started very well but the part of the execution of his parents and a 5 year old was the last straw for me, the author wants to pass on to his readers an emo and edgelord "MC", he simply accepted the death of his mother who took care of him throughout history because she saw that feeling as weakness, the worst thing is seeing all the comments in the chapter supporting these actions. I like to read about "MC" villains, but it has its limits, and the only thing I've seen about "MC" in the story is a pathetic, power-hungry emo, who just because he has feelings gets all BS full, no I know how the webnovel didn't censor this fanfic

I give so many stars because the story is very good in "MTL". The only doubt I have is if the author will change something or write something more than what was written by the original author.

I don't even know how to feel, the story was going very well, but here comes the author and makes the mistake of making the "MC" has his powers taken away by the arishem, and his powers like him were made by the OAA, never that arishem it was stronger than OAA, for me this just shows the point that at any moment you can take the power away from the "MC", so what's the point of reading this story? Writing Quality- 4 Stability of Updates- 4 Story Development- 2 Character Design- 2 World Background- 2

first, it's not wanting to belittle your story, because it's very good, but it's wanting to help maintain this quality. first, this desire to travel to another continent was very random, I even found it different from the character of "MC". Second point, having a psychic pokemon at an elite level 4 and still not being able to teleport a small number of 4 or 5 people, I don't know if this was a nerf or simply a huge hole in the script, so I think it's better to rewrite this chapter, because compared to the previous chapters, this one left a bitter taste in the mouth.

author, I understand your point of view, but you also have to understand the reader's. You developed the character and made his development go in one direction, but then suddenly he changes completely, of course the readers wouldn't like it, this new relationship had no development at all, it felt like the author was throwing the character away. It is not even possible to say that there is no way to change the "MC"'s view of moka, because if he still stayed with Ciri, who according to the author was also seen as a "sister/daughter", this only reinforces the idea that that child's development was just a move to take out certain characters, as it destroyed all the development before built. Not to mention that many readers who hated the birth of "MC's" son, the story should still focus on "MC", even more so when you are still so far from the beginning of the story, this child will only spoil the development and relationship of " MC", being proven when he was barely born and already destroyed an entire development of the character and their relationship, which could have been further developed and told more to the reader. my disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined.

author, I understand your point of view, but you also have to understand the reader's. You developed the character and made his development go in one direction, but then suddenly he changes completely, of course the readers wouldn't like it, this new relationship had no development at all, it felt like the author was throwing the character away. It is not even possible to say that there is no way to change the "MC"'s view of moka, because if he still stayed with Ciri, who according to the author was also seen as a "sister/daughter", this only reinforces the idea that that child's development was just a move to take out certain characters, as it destroyed all the development before built. Not to mention that many readers who hated the birth of "MC's" son, the story should still focus on "MC", even more so when you are still so far from the beginning of the story, this child will only spoil the development and relationship of " MC", being proven when he was barely born and already destroyed an entire development of the character and their relationship, which could have been further developed and told more to the reader. my disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined.

This whole chapter was a disappointment, the "MC" has the knowledge of the future, he saw that even though things changed, they still happened in the same way as in the original, but he only starts to worry about it after the damage has already been done, honestly, I think the author wants readers to be mad. because the character's development in these last chapters was zero, the "MC" keeps making mistakes in the same way, and then he keeps blaming himself, but this mistake made him lose all his points, honestly, what a disappointment, he was even enjoying your fanfics.