saw your request on the forum so I came and checked your story out. It's not bad although, some things like in the description and first chapters are quite confusing. Maybe I would recommend and see if you could formulate your description and sentences a bit differently it would be a massive improvement. Other than that the story has an interesting concept and if you develop it further the story may become potentially really be good. But as said the way some sentences and things are described need to be fixed, otherwise there is just too much confusion in my opinion. If you don't use it already, I would recommend you use grammarly. it has a free version and is very helpful

True lol forgot about that as I was reading the novel

thanks for giving us, even though not that long a good few chapters. Hope everything works it self out on your side and that you maybe one day will come back and finish the great novel of yours

things are getting more and more interesting

it's fine chapter was still good

great chapter

great chapter as always

very nice chapter

really good so far. Keep up the good work

loving the way you write

alright thanks

Is this the same as the previous novel or is it something entirely different?

Love this novel, hope the author one day continues writing. No pressure though. Still, if anyone wants to give this novel a shot. I would highly recommend it. One of my favourite novels, especially since it's about star wars

thanks