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not to mention, you already sold us on to dislike Kevin, Elena and Eva by showing their true hypocrisy in current timeline, and sold us on the lunatic Leonard who want control or just burn the world down if he cant control tendency. this recap of the past showed no purpose beside solidifying things that we already know. it getting tedious and serve no purpose since Asher like us, know this all along
someone is taking the "show dont tell" approach too seriously. i mean, as someone who read ur novel for quite sometime now, with bit of crumbs you left, i think it was more than clear what Asher's past look like and these few chapter is just a repeat of said crumbs you left.
understandable. inkstone does do this thing. to fix it, upload using a new draft instead of a used draft which were edited while writing. it always the old edited draft that tent to have this defect due to inkstone autosave function, so copy paste to a new draft and upload that one instead will solve this problem.
Rather, I think he will announce the grand opening of the Trial Ground, permitting not only the Ranker who won in the tournament, but also some people of those Elite and Householder choosing, which news will be earthshaking because it has never been done before. It will also attest to "their chance of refusal to what Farnus will announce" and "their greed that Farnus predicted will serve him right".As for revealing Kevin as his apprentice, that would be a stupid move and he knew that too. He had been keeping quiet about already having an apprentice after all, and when Asher told him that he knew, he become even more protective, knowing that if others know, Kevin's pitiful life will be foregone.
secondly, i think mc divine punishment should be enough, and no further punishment is necessary. from fat to lean, to handsome to charred, then slow recovery. these should be a good development, and it was better if u use this moment to further his character and throw his naivety
ur story is great tho, the flow is just right and it look like you already have a clear line ahead so there really isn't anything to comment about, lest we disturb ur story and mess it up
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