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  • Free20play12 hours ago
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    gacha is superior to sacred gear. gonna be honest don’t know why he even wants a sacred gear. he could wake up tomorrow with ultra instinct and reinhard van astreas power set or scion from the worm/parahuman verses power set. it just feels pointless. his gacha even gives him powers from character templates in setting without any baggage attached as we saw with le fay.

  • Free20play2 days ago
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    not an original story at all. how many emiya and shirou expies,si’s etc do you need crossed over with danmachi? make it shinji or something lol. be original. what is even the point anyways? emiya is basically the same as bell. both cookiecutter blank cardboard characters. its just boring.

  • Free20play2 days ago
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    there are already multiple danmachi stories that are much better written and completed with an emiya/shirou expy or si in danmachi that’ve already been done author. i feel like this story is just milking a dead horse. you could be original perhaps and do something unique. a shinji si or expy in danmachi joining say ishtar or freya or some oc god familia or going solo. this is. quite boring. i just don’t get it. what is even the point of this fanfic. best case scenario you reach out 100 chapters before dropping it. worst case this just gets abandoned in a week but never announced and updates given once every few months before officially being dropped. i don’t get it. what is so appealing on having a shirou in danmachi replace bell or parasitize him? why is it that most danmachi fanfic authors fall into two separate categories either they are super creative or completely uncreative. what is the point of creating another generic hero expy/blank cardboard character and having him replace another pre-existing one? why? nothing has changed. shirou is boring. bell is boring. neither act like how a person should. they are ideals or manifested tropes pretending at being people. its a shame since type moon crossovers could be done well but danmachi fanfic writers can’t seem to make it work without either a badly balanced/written system or straight up overpowered expies/si’s and story directions that barely differ from canon. here is my idea. something that took me literally 2 minutes to come up with. have someone from earth with little to no knowledge of danmachi outside of a general idea thrown into the setting with JUST mystic eyes of death perception. write it well and give him struggles give him trauma. have him rpped by some amazons or something. actually write a real fanfic worthy of yourself and us. i know you can do better.

  • Free20play18 days ago
    respondió a PcaNovels

    so you’re planning to have the mc gain buffed titan powers? it seems redundant tbh. susanoo and titan form overlap too much and frankly a susanoo is much much more cooler then a giant naked guy punching you and theres alot more it can do such as use jutsus for massive aoe damage.(such as sasuke lightning arrows or double kamui kakashis kamui shurikens) its kinda boring tbh. mc is already overpowered enough in the AoT setting. from a logical point of view idk why he even bothers with wanting to return to naruto verse as soon as a possible instead of going to countless worlds and powering up and destroying it when he’s nigh ommipotent or something. again think about future worlds mc visits. do you really want a mc in turning into a giant naked dude in some random anime or comic world outside of AoT. its going to look awkward and weird when seen by people from other settings. infact it may not even be useful at all. the regeneration comes from titan shifting too. and that furry titan suggestion makes me think this story is going to end up weird. it doesn’t make sense wasting a 10 year cooldown on an ability that won’t be used at all in the future after he leaves the AoT verse. acker superhuman bloodline makes alot more sense and may even lower the cooldown for his replication since sharingan eyes are buffed by strong yang/physiques. you do you author it just seems like a weird way and alot of handwaving. if you actually give mc a form of clairvoyance this early in the story it’ll seem weird and cause plotholes. frankly i don’t like future sight powers they’re hard to write down in fanfiction and too abstract. most of the titan powers are boring tbh.

  • Free20play18 days ago
    respondió a Vlad_6413

    he’s not actually david though his name is just david and something chinese.

  • Free20play19 days ago
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    story is good just don’t make the mc copy the actual titan powers. there are countless more useful things in the multiverse and i doubt a logical person would want a 10 year cooldown copy skill wasted on something he won’t ever use again and is limited outside of its verse. example the future sight of eren doesn’t work outside of AoT verse as it requires subjects of ymir to function. lets say mc gets into a scifi world or idk a somewhat realistic world. is he going to turn into a giant naked guy every chapter? also think about it from a powers standpoint. mc already has susanoo for giant battles. adding titan transformation ontop of that would just. be redundant. the best thing i could think he could copy would be ackermans superhuman physique bloodline.

  • Free20play19 days ago
    respondió a missile18

    okay lets think first. path’s wouldn’t work outside of attack on titan verse so thats a no go for say erens power.(so the future sight gimmick is useless outside of the verse) the eye may copy the power but not the biology so most likely he couldn’t go nom on the other important titans and gain their powers. i’m not sure if the mc even has the time to do so either. also beast titan would just turn the mc into a furry. honestly most of the titan powers are pretty much useless in the grand scheme of the multiverse and kinda like chakra don’t even work outside of the verse. the ackerman bloodline is the most obvious thing for the protagonist to copy. it’d probably help alleviate some of the issues with his mangekyous strain. idk why people want beast titan powerup. would mc even use it? realistically as a traverser of realities why would you want to even turn into a titan outside of of AoT? why would you waste something with a 10 year cooldown on something you won’t ever use again because it’d just look ugly,ugglo and weird? so ackerman bloodline is the only thing really worth it. is it the best form of stat boost? probably not but mc is working from a terrible talent pool. author could go the route of taking titan powers but again would mc ever use them after leaving attack on titan verse? probably not. so it’d just make no sense narratively unless mc is a dumbo.

  • Free20play2 months ago
    respondió a Free20play

    fergot to mention that chinese touhou x jjk crossover the mc tamed an Adult Rumia with his ten shadows technique and now Rumia basically lives in his actual shadow which is well interesting. i don’t think there was any real romance in it. the fic was referencing several other touhou fic universes too soo well it was interesting. atleast several of the characters were fanfic characters from other fanfic authors. only complaint was the author seemed to simp for this yakumo oc who was basically chara/fisk from undertale in a sense. she was from another fanfic it seems and also isekaid into the world mc found himself in which is a hodgepodge of several versions of touhou fics. my favorite chapters were the ones with mc unfortunately i felt too much writing was wasted on the other fic characters but it’s understandable as they also had systems of their own. still it was amazing since mc basically was overpowered af in a cool way he never said it outloud but everyone knew. he also later on got his own pocket fairy and i think he planned on making cirno his uraume but gave up before the parallel world arc near the end where he had to pretend to be a dead yakumo yukari(using kenjakus technique) because that parallel worlds version of the oc frisk/chara yakumo character went batshit straight from the beginning and killed basically reimus mom and their own version of yukari before gensokyo was founded and his system and morals made him want to fix the mess before returning back to his original timeline. the fic seemed to end shortly thereafter which was a shame since it was amazing to read. my only complaint was mc never interacted much with most of gensokyos cast and kept to himself. wish there actually was romance in it too otherwise it was near perfect. also the rumia the darkness youkai summoned mahoraga in that fic several times it was just as epic as you’d have expected.

  • Free20play2 months ago
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    i recommend a monster who levels up its short but good. there was one i remember about zombies and apocalypses actually several and they were all good. think it was my mv and the doomsday there was also unfathomable doomsday which was about a guy whose got isekaid and now his job is basically to effectively end entire settings as a villain. it started off well but i think the translator either fucked up because it became unreadable later on when mc summoner a female arthas. also experimental log of a crazy lich is a must read for anyone whose a lover of fiction. the story is way too epic. it peaks around the end game arcs when titans start appearing but drags midway though. as a reader you’ll end up actually missing the early slice of life chapters and village antics as they were genuinely uplifting. also release that witch. insanely long way too technical and i think you could probably skip like half the chapters and not miss out on much buuuuuuut the hassle is worth it. dc strongest gamer. probably the greatest dc fanfic ever as the author did his research and uses small time comic villains most people have never even heard from old comic books. i actually had to google the villains at times as i didn’t even know who they were. shows he put in effort to do research. early chapters were nice think it fell off hard personally midway through and later for me. others might disagree. lord of the mysteries. its godlike enough said. you know your fictional world is well written when people are creating their own spinoffs of it. reminds me of a chinese touhou fic with a jjk crossover si. the si is a composite character which makes him/her op as anyone whose dabbled in vs forums knows composite characters are usually insane. anyways mc genderbends himself later on in the story.(tbh i think anyone would try it once if they had mahitos idle transfiguration) sadly its not translated and only chinese but its amazingly well written.

  • Free20play2 months ago
    respondió a Yoh3t

    nope shes a nepo baby. kurenai got to where she is by knowing the right people and having the hokages son infatuated with her. kurenai’s one of the few characters in naruto who could die and tears wouldn’t be shed. if kishimoto were a better mangaka he’d have had her redeem herself by dying in a some memorable mission instead of fading into obscurity.