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1. Grammar: 4.5/5 - The grammar in this excerpt appears to be generally good, with only a few minor issues like missing punctuation and some awkward phrasing.2. Story: 4/5 - The story starts off intriguingly with the introduction of the young boy Yuri and the futuristic setting. However, there are moments where the pacing could be improved, and more details about the central conflict or plot direction could be introduced earlier to capture the reader's interest.3. Characters: 4/5 - The characters in the excerpt are well-differentiated, and their relationships are established effectively. There's potential for further character development and exploration in the rest of the novel.