mooseinatree

*that was bold if him to do* *that was bild of him to do so*

please i yearn for more

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or stripped

*her sword was covered in a layer if air*

bathe and rest?

no notes grammar ✅ world environment/building ✅ character development ✅ op-ness ✅ (acceptable levels) so long as there is no smut in later chapters i believe this could turn out to be a great novel worth investing a significant amount of time into the fact that there seems to be an overarching plot thats taking place in the background is very appealing to me most novels cant seem to do it right , they introduce a villain and give the mc a chance to kill him in the beginning then suddenly realize they want the villain to last longer so they give the antagonist stupid plot armor to survive a few more chapters only to be killed by the mc as a foot note anyways bookmarked and anticipating later chapters

ay bro WTFFFF

story is great so far the dialogue is a little bit cringe at some points but its tolerable the characters are well written and the world so far seems very well built but my main problem as reader is the grammatical errors, the non-use of contractions and weird sentence compositions make most sentences and paragraphs feel like it was written by a robot reading certain chapters felt like work because of how much effot i had to put in to try and understand what the author was trying to convey no shade toward the author but there are free grammar checkers out there where you can punch in your chapters to check for errors other than that im actually quite enjoying the story

itd be cool to see him tame beast with intelligence