Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws

Loved the story. Hope to see it have great success. The storyline is very nice. It's kinda different which makes it more interesting . looking for forward chapters 💜👍

It's a good work, mysteries are in place and I felt the brutality of forcing fourteen year-olds to war, I can't with it. The narrative is good and like I said it's a good work. Keep Slaying, Author💯

Mysterious enough to keep you engaged. Grammar was decent for me and plotting was carefully made. I like the story! 👍 Keep it up, more readers will surely get your work into their reading lists and will be in tune for your updates. Details were standard and narrations were fluent. Just like the other reviewers said, your story is lit! Gold!

WOW author, what an amazing introduction 🌸✨!! The first chapter is filled with just the right amount of mystery to keep any reader easily wanting to read more 🤩. And I absolutely love the fact that the author created Auo Ju to be such a smart character. I found his first conversation with Irene to be quite clever and enjoyable! This book is so good! I did notice an accidental shift or two between the past and present tense, but those simple mistakes didn’t at all hinder my reading. Great job author! This is a really good work :)

In my opinion, story wise, it is interesting to read but I just felt the main character is still lacking of something, a conviction perhaps? I hope to read that part soon. Thank you and good job.

The story so far was interesting, easy to read yet descriptive. I could even imagine what happened to the MC vividly through your words alone. To be honest, everything was polished, as if you’ve been an author for a long time. Since you’re doing pretty well, please continue with your passion and do not give up :). I can’t wait to continue reading new chapters soon!

The novel is moving on, very well. It has great potential to get into the nerves of the readers. The cliffhangers were the best part of engagements of it. keep it up, author!

Writing Quality: I'm not the person who dwells in grammar so much as long as it's understandable, but the writing quality is good. It is understandable, has little to no typo, and is clean. Aside from the occasional consecutive long sentences, it's great. What I do like about it is the narration. It really flows well and naturally. Stability of Updates: Not sure about this, but I hope it'll have a consistent release. Story Development: 5 chapters out and there wasn't anything much to say about the story yet. Understandable since the novel needs a bit of a warm-up before takeoff. So far, we only have questions, questions, and more questions. Looking forward to some answers and more questions. Character Design: Before I wrote this review, I check other reviews and says our mentally unstable MC is interesting. Personally, he is not. He is creepy. Not in a bad bad way but also not in a good way. I think interesting is an insult. It makes the mc sound shallow because the story is deeper and darker. The MC is someone you will observe because he intrigues you and not because he is interesting. There's a difference. That's why I said I liked the narration because I felt like I am sitting behind the one-way mirror and observing while waiting for what will unfold. World Background: still five chaps... so can't say anything. Overall, the story is nothing but mysterious. What's interesting about this novel is that it will not make you want for the next chapters. It will make you want the answers. Hence, you need more. And I think even though the first five chaps didn't have strong hooks, you will still end up reading the next one because of the lingering questions it'll leave in your head. I really liked what I read, and it's such a shame there are only five chaps. If there's 50 chaps, I would've read it in one sitting. I like crime and mystery. Although the tag is fantasy, I'm hopeful the vibe from the first five chaps will remain solid. Will I read it? Yes. I planned to follow this one. I hope it won't get dropped. For the author, you did a good job. Keep up the good work. I'm now your reader and although I'll be a silent one, I stab if you don't update. Jk jk. If there's anything I would like to suggest is to add more to the synopsis. I like short synopsis as a reader, but your synopsis is too short and doesn't give away anything. So readers might just ignore it. If not for the swap review, I would as well and missed this gem. Good luck! Looking forward to more chapters!

EvErYtHiNg about this book is great, only a few chps are released and can't wait for more. Great writing and plot, i will be rooting for this book and for the author in trhe near future.

I like your writing style so far. It is very descriptive helping the reader paint a vivid picture in his/her mind. The Mc with amnesia concept is pretty cliche, but it can work if the writing is good enough.

This book has so much detail the images are almost projected into your mind as you read. The characters are very detailed and described in a relatable and realistic way. The world background is a bit iffy, but it’s manageable if you think of it as present time in our world. I hope this continues soon...

I love the background dropping you have created.Its real good and the idea of a mentally unstable mc is awesome.Hope I can see more chapters from you.💚

Wow! I can feel my self in the mc's head and the story reminds me of one of my favourite animes 'Dead Man Wonderland' I love mystery and thrillers. Good job author!

I really like the story! The writing quality is amazing and is really understandable. There were no grammatical errors. The author is good at giving descriptions of areas and newly introduced characters, which was really helpful. The main character is really interesting and entertaining. The whole plot is well written and I can't help but want to read more. Keep it up author!

The premise is unique in the sense that’s more like studying the MC’s psychic condition, but I’d present more external experiences than inner monologues to create more impact with the reader, the grammar is very nice and overall I’d recommend, it kinda reminds me of a movie which title I don’t recal right now, about a grandpa that lived in England, the story is shown as if everyone thinks he’s going insane, as the spectator we think he’s right because we’re seeing his viewpoint together with his delusions, by the end of the movie, we’re surprised to know that he was mad all along. I’d recommend an approach like that to a psyche research book. Also be careful with the words you translate from Spanish to English, although some of them exist, they’re not widely used. Adolescent is not common, it’s mostly teenager that’s used in that case. Best of look.

A very nice story with a solid plot. It has enough intrigue to pull you in from just reading the synopsis. There are little to no grammatical errors making this a very easy read. Amazing work author! [img=recommend]

This book have everything you need... awesome work!! keep up the spirit and hope to see more wonderful works from you! The writing was captivating, the characters are believable and I care about them! :)

The writing quality is good so I gave you five star for that! So far, the story was also good and interesting. I can’t wait to continue reading new chapters soon. More chapters author! Thank you!!

The author has a way of describing things very vividly which lets you experience the book in a very interesting way. The plot is also interesting but I feel that the novel needs a little bit more work to translate from 'spoken language' to 'written language' .

This is one book that will keep you holding your breath! The author just knew the time to keep the readers hanging. It is indeed intriguing and so far, plot is developing beautifully. Great job author