The Bloody Angel

The story potential is high. The narration is splendid, the pacing and character designs are outstanding. World building is well thought, though the only problem is you need to roughly edit the Chaps. Dialogues are sometimes not starting with capital letters. The punctuations are misused and there are unnecessary spacings sometimes. Making me to pity the story as the potential is great. Write more and don't be discouraged, I know you will improve in one or two years time. Here's five stars to brighten up your mood. ✨

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The plot is great all around, far better then my moronic novel. The only problem is the spelling mistakes that should not exist at all. Btw, advice from a fellow author. I suggest you begin releasing 3 chapters a day each 4 hours apart. That's how you draw readers. That's how I got about 2k readers in only 2 days. Lots of people love to check the update section of a genre.

Author here guys, I have figured out lack of proper punctuation, grammatical errors and rushed dialogues. Will give my best to give error less work. Thanks

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you won't find a better fantasy thriller novel the narration is good the story is captivating and can easily understood few things were messing up the story but the writer fixed those so overall a good read nice work author

Writing quality brings this novel low. OP really needs to go over his writing with a spell check. Please, this would help make the novel look better. The description is a bit sleazy, but that's okay. Keep up the good work.

Interestingly, this is not out normal princess and the beast kind of romance. It is a new picture of romance entirely that will give you chills. It is a very intriguing novel that I will recommend to everyone. Please do add to your respected libraries. Thank you!

The story has potential. Armed with great world background and story progression, it will draw in readers, however, I did come across mishaps in the first few chapters. It includes the need of proper punctuation and was lacking spaces in areas, but it can be done with editing. Readers can try it out. Great job, author.

There's a lot I liked about this novel. The character descriptions are vivid. This novelist has a real ability to make you "feel" what the characters are experiencing. I thought the plot was entertaining and well-paced as well. The only point off would be in some of the grammar and spelling early on. But for me, that didn't make me enjoy the story any less.

quite nice I must say, you got a way with words.* whisper* the bloody angel. that really sent a chilling sensation down my spine, not forgetting the synopsis. the alphas are here...

The concept is one of the classics. It includes things such as coronations, royalty settings, and more! I really am a fan of those things (somewhat), and i do love your book~ There are some points that I'd like to point out. In making dialogue, it would be better if you could make the proper commans and periods for the conversations for example. "I want to be the Queen of the Lakes and Dolphins. I want a handsome king, just like you, daddy!" Bella smiled. Bella and Steve pointed towards the Queen's crown with glee. "I want that one." Steve told, "Your crows is so heavy, deaddy. I don't want it!" The king nodded, "Yes, dear." Some of the dialogues here a bit mixed and matched, so try implementing the tips I gave you and from the internet. Kudos for the author!

This is definitely an entertaining read for fantasy nerds like myself. the world itself is enticing and the story makes you not want to stop.

The idea of a ruthless princess is good. I think you should focus more on how you write and the way you plot the story. Try to read the books that you found comfortable and interesting then learn from how the authors wrote their books. Those are what I've always done to improve my writing. It takes time but practice makes perfect!

The idea and premise of the story is a great one. The idea of a kingdom having such a ritual in order to choose a crown prince/princess is in many way like those in old Norse or even that of Rome where only the act of suffering can one become strong enough to lead. However I only have one thing negative to say and that is the story is moving too fast as it feels like its on fast forward,

Pretty good I should say. The plot is good and the writing quality is also good. I love this kinds of stories. I can see the authors passion from reading it.

A very sweet cover page! The synopsis is intriguing and makes me curious about the content of your story. I like the way you use the typical classic novel scheme and mix it with other ideas. The plot is interesting. Well done! Good luck with the contest!

the writer has done awesome work, the story and narration both at their best, the chapter has a few grammatical mistakes but it doesn't make any big effect on the story that are been improved in the further chapters good work author

It's a beyond interesting concept with good world-building, characters, and story-development. Only problem I have is the quality of the writing. The vocabulary is great, It's just the diction which doesn't poke me right. If the author fixes those small mistakes then I bet this story could become a great one! All the best luck to your author!

one of the best political thriller and fantasy mix you can find on the whole webnovel app the writing is easy the story hooks from the start it's a must read