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Quick Transmigration: Goddess Of My Imagination

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Ali Avery was a successful young man adored by everyone. But things were not as they were shown to the life. Shunned and betrayed by his peers... He was hiding among happy facades. Everything changed for him on one fateful night when he awoke in a dangerous new world with a completely different body, and his guardian angel was also there to accompany him. A world where the impossible was possible while the imaginations were the reality of the dreamer. 'Am I a Goddess? I'm just a little different.' 'My imagination can become real magic, but isn't this energy point a bit too much?' Stranded in the new environment, new life, new strength, and new possibilities... How would he/she survive? --- Sequel: My Goddess is Good at Pretending

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Chapter 1Dark Past

Ali Avery was a talented young man who managed to realize his ideals by becoming a successful businessman. He built his career from very scratch. His efforts, which became a significant result of his hard work, made his family proud and happy.

From all sides of the spotlight seen by many people, no one knew or cared about Ali's dark past when he was young.

Young Ali didn't know when it started and why they did it, but his peers began to isolate and move away from him. At that time, young Ali's naive mind did not take the situation seriously and only thought he had just made a mistake and needed to correct it.

He just apologized if he did anything wrong to his peers and began to help with social activities that made him highly regarded by the teachers and the parents.

The situation got even worse with time. Young Al began to get rough treatment even from the older people in his family. Their emotions became less stable, and they could quickly become angry for specific economic reasons. It was not uncommon to treat young Ali with harsh treatment with an excuse as a proper discipline.

His opinions were often ignored and left with harsh words like "you're just a kid, what do you know!" and much more verbal abuse that came after that.

That treatment made him feel inferior, and he began to be afraid of many things. The situation worsened by spreading in many directions... Words like 'Ali, you better keep quiet!' and 'you're annoying, just go away!' were often thrown at him.

'I just want to help.' 'What did I do wrong?' Young Ali began to sink into the sea of ​​self-blame.

Several months passed with that treatment, and young Ali didn't even have friends at the time. He just buried everything he felt deep in his heart, unable to express it and could only suffer silently.

Until he got a friend who often came to the park and accidentally met him, they often played together. The two boys became best friends afterward. Young Ali thought the friendship between him and his playmate was quite close, so he began to talk about himself about what he had gone through.

The outcome was not what he expected. His best friend also avoided him with the excuse, 'I don't want to get involved with you anymore'. Young Ali's mental condition became worse afterward due to his best friend's betrayal, who began to join in bullying himself with other people.

Bullying really turned out to be excessive when he had moved up to a higher level of education. Now, he often received some physical abuse for the reasons he didn't even know.

However, when the physical abuse news reached the teachers' and parents' ears, they only considered it a joke of children in general and did not take the situation seriously. No one knew, young Ali's mental state was getting worse and had caused a deep trauma.

'I didn't do anything wrong. I did my best. What makes me deserve this treatment?' Young Ali started to question himself. He was devastated, and nobody cared. He reached, and no one was there.

Over time, young Ali became more aware of himself and paid more attention to his environment.

He had become more fond of being alone than in a crowd, quiet as his consolation, and a remote place as his sanctuary. He unconsciously built a very high self-awareness towards himself and the environment around him.

When young Ali entered junior high school, he began to resist the abusive treatment of his peers. The sharp gaze he gave to the people who wanted to bully him managed to shrink their evil intentions.

The bullying still happened several times because the numbers were not small. They also did not hesitate to cause injuries to young Ali's body. He was threatened not to tell anyone if he didn't want things like that to continue.

Some compassionate responses were only offered to him without really helping him from those who knew the incident's ins and outs. Young Ali knew that no one would help him, but he also realized he was utterly alone.

Young Ali knew it couldn't go on anymore, so he started to fight back when the bullying incident came to him again, regardless of what happened to him.

The incident took a big turn, but young Ali emerged as a victim. However, he was feared as a thug or a hoodlum. He who had no friends ended up losing the opportunity to make any friends.

Everything improved after young Ali entered senior high school in another city. Although he was quiet and more likely to be an introvert, he made many acquaintances due to his firm, straightforward, and reliable character.

The events he experienced in the past made him afraid of friendship, and he only considered them as just acquaintances.

Time was a helpful medicine for young Ali. He began his career as an entrepreneur immediately after graduating from senior high school in the overseas land.

The business he was doing sped up so fast, but it did not last long. His trusted person, who had the highest power after himself, betrayed him and took all company assets from him.

Ali realized it all too late, and he could only mourn his bitter fate after everything had crumbled.

His confidant's response when he asked about why she chose to betray after all the trust he gave was limited to 'The world is cruel, so you have to get used to not trusting anyone. You are still too naive in this kind of field, Ali'.

Deep trauma and dark memories came back to haunt Ali even after a long time in the deep burial after suppressed by him after all this time.

He returned to his hometown with invisible sorrow and wounds. There was a desire to end his life immediately and be free from this cruel world. However, a strong urge to keep trying came afterward, given that he had survived several severe accidents at a young age.

Four times he was hit by a vehicle that did not comply with traffic regulations. His body was thrown off due to the heavy impact. Strangely, the whole incident did not cause pain and injury. Whether it was an external or internal wound when taken to the medical room for examination.

Ali realized something that was not real but felt real, his guardian angel was still with him and always protected him by his side.

Faith and determination arose when he realized he was not destined to always be slumped in life. He started his career from scratch again.

He participated in particular competitions with prizes, and he managed to win them to be used as venture capital money. It was also used to expand his connections with many parties.

Heartless leaders, cruel bosses, and selfish clients often evoked intense reactions because of his deep trauma.

Ali once again struggled against his fear and suppressed his body's intense reaction. His body and heart became so cold, it felt like a painful squeeze. He was trembling with the trauma of his fear.

His hard work and perseverance once again produced sweet fruit. He became a businessman in his hometown who took care of various fields. He had been considered a winner in life by living comfortably in a beautiful house, cars lined up neatly in the garage, and his profession, which was highly valued in society.

At the peak of his career, his father and mother lived with him... Also, his cousin lived with him right after she became an orphan.

In the world, only his little family he could care about. Other things might change him, but he started and ended with his family. Acquaintances only came and left at their convenience while coworkers only used each other for their personal benefit... But, only his little family remained with him even though they had their own shortcomings.

"Linda... Breakfast is ready, let's eat then go to school!" Ali called his cousin from the dining room. She was engrossed in watching a children's cartoon on the television in the living room.

"Yay! Brother Ali is the best! I love you!" His cousin immediately turned off the television and joined Ali in the dining room.

Linda Esmeralda was a cheerful girl full of flowers and stars. She was in junior high school, Linda was finally able to move forward from the sadness of an orphan over the death of her parents.

"Yeah, yeah... You just love my cooking." Ali didn't seem to care.

He had been cooking for quite a while for himself and forged his cooking skills to an advanced level. Ali also often became a chef with his mother or went to cook alternately for their little improved family.

"Hehe... How is that possible. Oh yeah. Where are uncle and auntie?" Linda asked before eating her breakfast.

"They've gone to their shop, you lazy girl. See what time it is?" Ali pointed to the clock on the wall. It showed half-past seven.

"Mfm... They are... Mmm... I see... Nyam... Diligent." Linda praised while chewing her food.

"Don't talk while you eat. Well, even though I told my parents not to open the shop and let me support them, but they still refused."

Ali's father and mother refused his request because the shop they had opened for a long time had several permanent workers. Their workers would have economic difficulties if they were laid off. Besides, his parents did not have the heart to close the shop and retire because of the frequent old customers.

Because in his youth Ali grew solely from the shop income. He only let his parents open their shop even though they did not receive much profit, given the intense competition in this global era.

After Linda finished her breakfast, she went straight to her room to shower and change into her school uniform. Then, she returned to the living room, and Ali was already waiting for her.

"Alright, let's go. I'll take you to school before going to my office." Ali invited Linda, he put on neat clothes and was about to go to his office. Dropping his cousin to school was like a routine for him.

"Un! Let's go!" Linda excitedly left with Ali.

Ali really enjoyed this warm and modest life. He still had deep trauma and intense bodily reactions due to his dark past experiences. Still, he was able to entirely hide that fear perfectly deep in his heart.

Little did he know, this was only the beginning of his story that would become more profound and the end of this brief warmth.

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So, it’s time for my long overdue 25-chapter review (I’m 113 chapters in at time of this review). As always, I will try to remain positive and give impartial feedback. Note: this review is very long and doesn't contain a TL;DR. Pros (the good) > Character development. It isn’t very often that writers give a chapter intro to the MC when they are in their original world and this can cause issues with character development in the early chapters (there are exceptions). The fact that the MC does have such a chapter (and it’s so damn realistic, it’s scary), really helps to establish that connection between the reader and the MC. Being able to relate to the MC truly makes a story more enjoyable. > World building. Another great forte of this story is its sense of wonder for the world. I don’t really know how to describe this but establishing an attraction from the reader to know more about the world is evidence of good writing. While the specific laws for this world haven’t been clearly defined yet (what are the restrictions), there is still tonnes of time to establish this in future chapters. > Realistic characters. This is pretty self-explanatory. I’m not really sure why readers/writers like it when the MC acts so unrealistic but I know that I don’t. The main thing I want to draw attention to is the MC’s trauma. I have seen a couple reviews and comments on people complaining about the MC’s passivity but there are two major factors at play which make the MC’s current passivity a more likely scenario if it were played out realistically. First, the MC is not sure of the extent of their abilities. This is becoming less an issue where I am in the novel but in earlier chapters it is a major factor. Second, clicking your fingers and suddenly you’re okay is just complete BS, especially if it is the sort of trauma described in the MC. Clearly most people here possess the lowest of the lowest quantities of knowledge for how psychology works and I find people’s unrealistic desires are more annoying than the passivity of the MC. The MC isn’t even that bad. When pushed into a corner, they will definitely release their ability and pretty much pummel the other party and they are recovering at a rate that could already be considered quite rapid. I’m not about to explain the psychology behind the MC’s actions. I don’t have that much time. If you want to know, go look it up yourself. Cons (what needs fixing) > Grammar. Haha, I’m not really sure how many times I have said this in a review but it is definitely allot. Accurate use of grammar is necessary in order for a reader to be able to interpret certain sentences correctly. In particular, the inaccurate use of commas is an issue in this novel as I have occasionally found it hard to determine sentence breaks if I’m just chill reading. How can this be fixed? Easy. Just read the sentence to yourself slowly and, wherever you notice there is a natural pause, place a comma. Just take note of where I leave my commas in this review if an example is necessary. Leave a comment, author, if you need further elaboration. > Munted sentences. Thankfully, these are few and far between. In fact, I have not come across any in recent chapters. Basically, these are sentences which can be difficult to interpret or can be interpreted in more than just a couple of ways. They often occur when writers get into their “zone” and start just writing whatever comes to mind then forget to proof read. As an editor, I have seen my fair share of munted sentences and can fix them in my head quickly but it may be more difficult for lighter readers. As I already said though, they mostly don’t exist in the most recent chapters, which is great! Grey area (what doesn’t classify as particularly good nor necessarily need fixing) > Technicalities and science. I realise that this isn’t a major focus of the novel (it is fantasy afterall) but, as a man of science, I feel compelled to address the author’s use of… “speed of light” travel. *Gasp* *horror* That’s right, I said it! So, the problem with travelling at the speed of light is twofold. First, the connotations of travelling at such speeds, and second, but a bit less importantly, the ability to actually see at such speeds. I’ll dumb it down allot so, if you want more details, leave a comment with the question you want answered. - First issue. It is common knowledge that travelling at the speed of light is impossible thanks to special relativity- “But Wolf, there is magic in this worl-“ Hold ya horses, I’m not done yet. Assuming that you were able to achieve such a speed through some unnatural means like magic, an event known as matter warping will occur. You ever ask why scientists can only propel fundamental particles near the speed of light? Yeah? This is why (also energy requirement but that’s besides the point). Basically, when an object speeds up, it gets hotter due to the latent energy contained within the object. We don’t notice this as humans because we are not moving nearly fast enough for this to be realised. Well, when an object travels fast enough, the heat in the object will be enough to destabilise the particles atomic structure and it will split down into its fundamental particles. “But Wolf, that’s why they use a shiel-“ I’m afraid that protection against forces causing friction won’t help you here. Same as g-forces, a shield won’t be able to protect you because It is based solely on how fast you are traveling, not what you are traveling through. So, I’m now happy to reveal to all the readers and author that, congratulations, the moment the MC achieved “speed of light” travel, they were disintegrated into their fundamental particles, but there is a workaround. - Second issue. Assuming that the above isn’t an issue (I’ll describe how to get around it momentarily), the MC would most certainly NOT be able to see while traveling at such speeds, at least, not without the help of magic to scan the area. Neglecting the fact that your brain definitely cannot calculate that fast, traveling at the speed of light means, well, there ain’t no light reaching your eyes, at least, not in the way you want it to. This is more a hypothetical thing as no one has ever travelled anywhere near the speed of light, but you would likely see an array of colours in the form of streaks zipping past at ludicrous speeds relative to you. Definitely no discernible images. It would look something like the lightspeed jumps common in space simulators like Hellion, Elite Dangerous or Star Citizen. Actually, maybe not Elite Dangerous as that is a bit different. So, what is the workaround? Easy. Just a simple two words, ‘spatial manipulation’. The last part of this review is directed more towards the author in case they want to delve more into a science explanation later on in the novel, as such, I will change my vocabulary to make it seem as though I am having a conversation with them. The advantage that you have in this novel is that you haven’t really defined any laws for how the mana itself actually works and, that means, you don’t have to worry about altering past chapters (not that I expect you to anyway). Because the MC’s magic works off of imagination, it means that the mana just has to work around the laws while still upholding the MC’s will. It might seem as though the MC is being accelerated to “c” (speed of light) but this is not necessarily the case. So long as the MC’s will is done, it doesn’t matter how the mana goes about it. Spatial manipulation is the key here. What the mana is actually doing is enclosing the MC (and their pet) in a sealed spatial plane/subdimension, (a bubble if you will) which is imposed on the actual plane, and then accelerating the ENTIRE subdimension to the speed of light by shrinking space in front and lengthening space behind causing a wormhole effect. That way ‘space’ is what is taking the effect of lightspeed travel rather than the entities within said space. Since you would be using the wormhole effect, a shield would not even be necessary as the MC is not physically traveling at lightspeed, their temporary subdimension is. Using this theory, you would be able to even exceed lightspeed. Would this still cause nausea, my oath it would, so you don’t have to worry about removing the MC’s pet’s reaction. Keep in mind that this does not fix the second issue. The MC would still need to use magic to see. Final thoughts Well, there you have it! The good, the “needs fixing” and the in-between. Do I recommend this novel? Abso-f*cking-lutely! Just don’t click on this novel expecting romance (not at the current releases anyway) or an MC who stomps on everyone who is in their way. If that’s what you want, this novel is not for you. But the reader is their own best critic. Still not sure? Give it a go. There is only one way to find out if you will like it or not. It's a shame I could not give this novel a solid 5 stars (as I would like to) but the mistakes brought it down to 4.6 (I'm being impartial remember). As I’ve already said, if anyone has any questions or problems with my review, leave a comment and I will answer if I can. …1590 words later… Holy sh!t I need to find a better way to spend my time other than writing essays on how an author is going on their work. Don’t ever tell me that I don’t support the authors that I read from.

Foxner
FoxnerLv13

Alright, this will be a critique of the story where I focus on what I believe to be are problems with the novel. This is mostly written for the author but for potential readers I recommend reading this review along with positive reviews. This is a great novel and I highly recommend reading it. Anyways on to the critique. I am currently on chapter 540. WQ - 5; SD - 3; CD - 4; US - 5; WB - 5 (these initials corespond to the rating criteria). (1) Alright so this one is just a matter of preference but one of my biggest frustrations with the story is how slow everything is. I've been reading this for a while now so it's hard to remember, but I think only a month has passed in the story, yet we are already 500+ chapters in. A full chapter could be a conversation about a somewhat irrelevant topic like shopping in one of the most recent chapters. I consider a lot of the chapters just excess to the actual story and most of the time when I see a new chapter I only really expect to get about like two sentences of story and the rest is fluff for the story. Most of the time I just let it sit for a couple of days so the chapters accumulate. But anyways, in short: most chapters could be summarized in about two sentences such as 'we traveled to this country. During our travel we had a casual conversation while these two characters bickered with each other.' Writing wise, I suppose this is fine, I don't really know, I'm not an expert. It seems the author wants the story to be more about how the characters get to the important parts of the story and is probably trying to make the story slow. Some people prefer stories like this so it's just a matter of personal preference. But I just think it's WAY to slow. (2) Now this is one of my biggest issues with the story writing wise. There is 0 conflict between characters. I feel like sometimes the protagonists are a group of 'yes people.' What I mean by this is Elysia suggest something and 100% of the time, everyone agrees. What makes things worse is that most chapters are about conversations between the characters. This just makes a lot of the chapters feel kinda basic... I'm not really sure how else to describe it. I mean, don't get me wrong, I do enjoy reading the chapters, it's just it feels like it's missing that extra depth to what makes conversations interesting. I think at the moment, the most interesting parts of the most recent chapters (excluding story progression) is the conflict between the two bickering characters (I won't name them for the sake of spoilers). (3) I feel like the overarching story needs some minor improvements. Like why is the MC even in school at this point (she doesn't even show up anymore). I understand in the beginning she was trying to understand the world and get rooted, but now it's unnecessary. Also, why are gods acting as messengers? I feel like a more realistic situation would have been they forced all the rulers to meet, talked about the big threat, and creat an alliance. Then they focus on getting stronger and work on gathering information. Anyways, the way the story is now is fine, but I feel like the protagonists should be trying to connect big figures of the world. Also, the overarching story is a little more on the basic side since it's: these are the bad guys, we don't know much about them nor do we know their motivation; all we know is they are the bad guys and we will engage in a world war. Then dump a giant bag of sightseeing and casual talk and that's the basics of the story. However, then again, I feel like barely any of the overarching story has progressed so it hasn't really been able to gain any depth despite it already being like 500+ chapters in. Other then these three things I can't really think of any other critiques at the moment. If I do, I will add a comment to this review. Anyways, overall, I like the novel and I will continue reading it till the end. Keep up the great work author and way to go on staying strong with one chapter a day. That's an amazing feat, I would know since I'm a fellow author. I hope this is helpful 😁.

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