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Endless Universes - Young Master Path - The 1368th

This novel is on hiatus. Read 2nd last chapter. Tired of the usual heroes defeating an arrogant young master? One another young masters come and get crippled because of little things? Those young masters keep pestering the hero like a cockroach. After the young masters get defeated their older brothers, younger brothers, sisters, wives, mother, father, grandmothers, grandfathers,... and the entire 10 generations of his family come to get revenge, fight the main character one by one, and killed by the main character? Until the whole clan or sect destroyed? Fear not! This is the story of a young master. A spoiled and SILKPANT arrogant young master. This is the story of Trevon McArthur. The self-proclaimed number 1 young master from his city. He isn't a genius who hides behind a fake young master persona. He is a genius who embraced the spoiled young master way. He is a real spoiled young master. He is that PERVERTED, arrogant, SPOILED, SHAMELESS, self-centered, and COWARD young master that every child of God hates. He is a webnovel reader who will use his novel knowledge to bully his way to those children of God. His dream was to conquer all supreme beauties of the universe. He wanted to walk in the path of many other successful webnovel male main characters had walked. The path of having a harem. To have a Super Harem. Super Many. Super Beautiful. But is it that easy? Would those supreme beauties agree to be his harem? To share the love with other ladies? What kind of adventures will he have? A fight between spoiled young master to be the number 1 young master in the universe? A fight with children of God for the beauties? A fight between spoiled young master vs chosen young master? What does he have? A system? Supreme Cheats? He got them covered. Gwahahaha. A kind handsome and cool grandpa? (Checked) A strong and rich family for his background? (Checked) System? (Erm... Similar but not the same) Personal Magical Space? (Checked) Contracted Beast? (Checked) Farming? (Checked) Job? (Checked) Personal Kingdom? (Nope, he gets an entire Universe to build. Personal Universe) Genius Wife (Erm... Checked) Transmigration (Nope, Other student.) Reincarnation (Nope, Other student.) Game Element (Checked.) Dungeon (Checked.) Master Rabbink had changed his destiny. This spoiled young master walks in the path of Godhood. Could he become the 1368th God? Note: Volume 1 is more Slice of Life, Volume 2 would start his 'adventure'. Gwahahaha. Warning 1: Trevon is also a webnovel reader. He might comment on the novel. Do not ask for spoilers from him (he is about 50 chapters ahead)! Do not share modern technologies! It would be his extra cheat if you do. This is him: https://www.webnovel.com/profile/4300980713 Warning 2: Slow pace. Master Rabbink planned the story to be a relaxing one, where one could flaunt his power. This is an oasis for readers after hectic adventures in other novels. Warning 3: Early chapterS contains wall of text. This Rabbink need to edit, but lets completed the story first. Warning 4: The MC is ARROGANT young master. If you don't know them, they are the 'stupid' young master who always clashed with usual main character. They are usually Arrogant, Coward, Bully, Greedy, and Pervert. Usually competing for MC's woman, treasure, etc. They are weak but using their family background to bully. This novel is a parody. Note: For more information check Information Chapter. Release Schedule: 0 chapters/week. Promise: NEVER DROPPED (detailed promise in Introduction). Sorry, it enter hiatus state. This Rabbink will never change the 1st line. Author Tag: Weak to Strong, Slow Story, Time Skip, Male Main Character, Harem?, System?, Kingdom Building?, Game Element.

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Announcement

Gwahahaha. (Evil laugh).

Wew! Around 2 months, this Rabbink didn't touch this account or writing the story. A proper explanation is owed to readers.

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Explanation:

1. This Rabbink is required to focus on my company. Other shareholders are complained about the company progress. With writing, this Rabbink's concentration is divided. Writing took around 6 hours per day. So, a personal oath not to touch writing happened. (Probably it will become more busy in Year 2019.) This is my dream job and will never be replaced with being an author.

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2. Miss Rabbink. (Gwahahaha. Enough said.)

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3. Reading > Writing. After long time not following some of my webnovels. They gave a huge stockpile. This becomes this Rabbink's favorite past time. During the past 2 months, this Rabbink reads many female MC novels (Unfortunately not in Webnovel, most are female revenge story in Ancient China.).

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4. De-motivated. Writing no longer fun (it is harder to find joke idea for this story). The biggest reason.

This story is planned for 800 Chapters Long. Consisted of 10 Volume. The story is only about to reach Chapter 129 in Webnovel. My Dropbox stockpile is Chapter 138 at the latest. (This Rabbink met with a huge Author's Block at this chapter.). However, the readers' support started to fall (Power Stone voting is started to reduce. Not in rank but in total votes.). This Rabbink didn't plan to get money (make it Premium or contracted, since this Rabbink can't. My income comes from the company in earth life. Adding secondary income will put me in more expensive tax system. Indonesian will know PPH 420.), so Power Stone & Readers comments & review is what motivated this Rabbink. With downtrend sign, and over 600+ chapters left (that is about 1.800~3.600 hours of writing). This demotivated this Rabbink.

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Yet. The trend, no new readers to pick this novel and replaced the old readers (who perhaps become bored). This is not the fault of readers but the author. Point number 5 will explain that. (In short, this Rabbink's poor writing ability made the Volume 1 too long (almost 3 Harry Potter novels just for introduction, Oh LOL!), and discourage many readers to pick, too many info dump, lack of conflict, etc).

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This Rabbink took online writing class during free time. Anyone who inspired to write can Google Brandon Sanderson in Youtube. Which made this Rabbink realized what a mess in the story. Gwahahaha.

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5. The Story Plothole. (Long Rant below, What's Next about this novel is after this.)

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5.1. This Rabbink saw, my plotline is weak. The main goal of the novel when this Rabbink started to write is to have FUN. MC will Joked and messed around (to Trevon aka Slapstick) and common Xianxia Plot (turn over every plot, A hero win tournament? No. The MC is not a hero so he won't win (except by Cheating). Beauty throw themselves to hero? No. MC is a young master, beauty ran away from him. Gwahahaha, something like that.). However, the desires of readers are proper story with better plot and twist. This Trevon's adventure is not about a cool weak person grow into powerful God. However, it is the craziness and messed up he walked toward the path.

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5.2. Not active Hero. Trevon as MC is "forced" by Rabbink to change. This created conflict between them. However,... Readers loves active MC. Not Lazy MC. They want an MC who want to be the best. (Pokemon.). Trevon is already a Young Master. Does he want more? He has protective family, title (young master), money (enough said), only lack WOMAN (He can go to pleasure house tho). Some of critique are well deserved for this point. In likeability as a character, Trevon is 0. He is passive, not capable (as with other young master), and hard to be likeable (coward, cheater, etc).

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5.3. Big Plot Hole. A coward will be fun, but a Coward with Scout as his cheat is not. (GRRR... This Rabbink actually changed a lot Volume 2, this made me demotivated. The Debt Collector changed from 1 person into 4 people. It is because Trevon can 'scout'. GRRRR!!! A coward will be fun if he fall into trouble. HOWEVER, Scout helped Trevon escaped/avoid many Troubles planned by this Rabbink. Unless this Rabbink made a big plot hole that he is too LAZY to scout. Trevon is too OP. His cheat helped his personality and reduced his conflict. If this Rabbink wanted to take one cheat from him, it would be Scout.

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A webnovel (check Webnovel's Book of Author) suggested self-fulfillment, self-substitution, and cheat.

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5.4. Poor writing lead and design led to poor Self-fulfillment. Trevon has everything except girl and great cultivation. In the book, Webnovel's editor mentioned leveling up (Ups! To make this real, this Rabbink made a cultivator needs thousand years to cultivate, Gwahahaha. This is why Trevon needs time-skip.), miracles (This Rabbink is miracles. Gwahahaha.), treasure (Universe Store make treasure too cheap. This Rabbink will need to get higher margin. Gwahahaha.), love (This is why this Rabbink increased the meeting with Female Lead), Fighting Enemies (a coward?), and Status (He is already a young master from number 1 family in the continent). Almost all miss.

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5.5. Self-Substitution. Big mistake here. The goal of this novel is an MC that you can 'influence' and chat with. A friend. The readers will not substitute into the MC but readers will 'connect' with MC and the 'grandpa' trough comment. Nobody wanted to become a 'coward' young master. This was better when Trevon could use his status to mess around in Redwood. This Rabbink believed some readers wanted to know 'what is it to be the young master'. Most Xianxia novel had their MC's family destroyed or left behind because they became too weak for MC.

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Point above lead to even confusing part.

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5.6. Confusing VIEWPOINT. This novel dips into 2nd person point of view. Master Rabbink is the Game Master of the story, and readers could influence it. Gwahahaha. Wanted more fight, Trevon got more troubles. Another example freakmedic talked about dungeon, an inheritance dungeon moved from later chapter to the front. Yet, it is written from 3rd Point of View story. However, the Rabbink is inside the story. So it also become 1st person story. (a side character (Rabbink) telling MC's story from its point of view.). The Rabbink wrote itself as 3rd person in the store. So it should be 3rd person limited, but Rabbink is a GOD character. It could know everything. This combined 3rd person limited and 3rd person Omniscient. (If some readers felt confused, this is one of why.). Yet, most novel with 3rd person Omniscient narator are fair, but the Rabbink is not. It selectively removed some information to "trap" Trevon. For example, The Rabbink knows who is Debt Collectors, but it didn't mentioned about them. This is fun actually, but this Rabbink writing ability is not up to use that 'difficulty'.

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5.7. Author's Block. This Rabbink wanted to make an antagonist with reason. However, the current plot is not good enough. Some of TV serial that I watched have an antagonist that could be supported (Someone like Sephiroth who FFVII fans adored, but making one Debt Collector into four character made this Rabbink had plot holes for their background. This Rabbink wanted to fill the hole, but the block frustrated this Rabbink to continue.) Actually, Readers could see who are they so far. The clue for three out of 4 are in the beginning of the Volume 2.

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==End of Rant==

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Lesson Learned (for readers who wished to write.)

1. Take an online class to increase writing ability. This Rabbink started without knowing point of view (this mixed story), only with idea (many plot holes, his Scout skill is biggest mistake. This ability is TOO OP for a coward), without knowing the difference between TELL and SHOW.

2. For people who wish for contract. Plan the story for 2000-3000 chapters. For those who wished to do it for hobby. 1 Novel = 70k~200k long. So for a hobby author, the story should be planned between 70~200 chapters long. There is many better and fun newer novel. 200 chapters will ensure the novel always felt new.

3. Shorter Chapter. 800 is the best for webnovel readers. 2k is maximum. 1.3~1.5 is the sweet point. Trevon has 3.7 as average.

4. More actions. More active MC. This is must. Whether they are good or anti-Hero. Active hero is the best.

5. "Grandpa" character should disappear. This is a big plot hole. Should this Rabbink disappear from the story? (T_T) Don't want! Gwahahaha. The Rabbink's life mission is to haunt the MC.

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What's Next:

This is what important.

1. Please don't vote for this novel! A hiatus novel didn't deserve votes. This is a big burden. Gwahahaha. (Urgh... Debby_chan and Qweds, Owlseye, Dontlookdown, freakmedic, Jio, wilklenfy, Arania, donutoutlaw, and many others. This Rabbink didn't deserve the vote.). I think this Rabbink will try to complete Volume 2 to make a better break point.

(This will be written to Chapter 160. 22 Chapter left. Probably 2-3 months using current willpower.) and uploaded in quick succession.

2. and this novel will go into a Long Hiatus. (~ 1 Year) BECAUSE...

3. For this novel, this Rabbink wanted to REWRITE. However, since this novel aimed for 'fun' and "stupid" jokes. I don't know whether the jokes will be there, this is the hardest part, 2nd time won't be sweeter. This Rabbink thought of what naughty thing could be done. This may disappear and the rewrite may become a "serious" novel. This is a big decision and this Rabbink will need long time to think about this. Without a rewrite the Volume 1's length and pace will keep discourage readers. When this novel is around Top 50, the Collection rate of this novel is LOW compared to relative ranked novel. Other had 5k+ closed to 10k collection, but this novels had only 2k collections. (Dedicated readers vote for this novel. Thank you for that.). This novel didn't have any plan to be dropped (since this Rabbink like this novel, but the sad part, this novel found few but very dedicated readers who like this novel). At this time, this Rabbink doesn't have any motivation to continue writing this for now (completing it to Volume 2 will be forcing this Rabbink's willpower, Please stop voting after that, Pretty Please! Vote when it is continued.). When this Rabbink decided to 'stop' you can see the 'promise' in introduction. This Rabbink still remembers that. Another option is to cut the story at certain interval. Perhaps after Volume 5 (this will total to 400 chapters). This options will need lots of time to think. Sorry for this. AND...

4. At the same time, this Rabbink has to admit it had written 2nd novel during this 2 months. It is reaching Chapter 24 (32k words long, same old problem of length but at least better. Gwahahaha.) now. But without any plan to upload this novel to Webnovel (Editing took 1 hour per 1k words. With work, the time for hobby is reduced, that time is enough to write but not enough to edit and post. 1 Trevon's chapter = 2.5k words lately = 3 hours writing+3 hours editing ~ 6 hours total. With over 600 chapters left and the low reception, this made a discourage view. I will spend 3.600 hours~150 full days to write a novel that few people read.)

== Actually lesser time to write was one of the reason why my stockpile gets reduced and reduced. Everyone remember this Rabbink started 50 chapters ahead, but there are only 10 chapters in stockpile now.).

This Rabbink next novel is about cultivation universe based on card. (The genre seems has some traction in ranking, but the card idea is not following other novel, the idea came when this Rabbink posted this novel the first time here Around July 2017). This novel will be this Rabbink's chance to practice and refreshed my mind from 'review', etc. I don't know whether this Rabbink will post this when it is completed (since it is a classic Xianxia style, good MC, etc to show this Rabbink can write a 'normal' story.). As a proof, that this Rabbink didn't die (not RIP, Celestial Rabbink is eternal as long as there is destiny), lie, or idle, next chapter will show the "Prologue" aka Chapter 1 - Beta Version (unedited and not yet proof-readed for grammar, etc).

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So it will be a long goodbye for now until when this Rabbink post the rest of Volume 2, after that this Rabbink will look into its plot and takes time to decide.

Wish you, Celestial Readers, a fun, success, healthy, and happy year in 2019. Happy Adventuring!

"Gwahahaha!"

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