Good start, the first 15 chapters are good but you can see that the quality declines slightly as the chapters go on , it's a real struggle to read these interactions with Tenten, these uncomfortable, like those old people from the village who complimented you when I was little , he's an adult in a child's body, he shouldn't have noticed Tenten's beauty like that , see him flirting with her, God, just ewww. I hope the author fixes this , it's really important , the fact that the only description when he notices someone female is that she's pretty is pretty weird , the last chapter is discouraging, the fact that he took a mission without the consent of the Village pourrait consister à une trahison, c'est strict military government, il n'est que de la chair à canon , he is quite idiotic and thoughtless . I'm afraid that this story will end up becoming like the other story with Shikamaru SI, I have not been able to read more than 5 chapters of each other, please author don't spoil this story. If the interactions with Tenten or more precisely the main characters improve, I will return with 5 stars

The plot is followed by a over generous dose of stupidity and plot induced idiocy. The chapters feel more like 1/4 a chapter with abyssal word count. The other doesn't seem to have learnt anything from his previous attempts.

this book is on its way to become a banger. another kamidemond W

In the starting story was good but it start getting worse after 25.. how to make good story bad you read it here . Story development is bad ,

The story has too many grammatical errors. Using the 10 Shadows curse technique in Narutoverse is quite interesting. My rating would be higher if there was no unnecessary forced early romance with Tenten and also like any other fanfic transmigrator, he starts advising her and yapping. The same shit can be found in many Harry Potter, Naruto, Black Clover fanfics. Maybe if the author made the story darker than canon, with tension always hanging in the air, this would be one of the best fanfics.

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The dialogues are cringe. The author lacks info amd creativity. The only thing keeping up the hyoe of the fic is the og Jjk and Naruto fans wanting to read more in hopes of betterment.

Slow pace. Nerfed MC. Hiding true technique without reason. Ooh, forcing romance with fmc. Actually how your old stories.

Amazing story I didn’t know there was a rewrite until recently and I’m glad because i got to read a lot of chapters back to back although i really hope the author would post more pictures in the comments like the main character appearance or some of the shinigami that only showed up in the manga