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Little_El
Little_ElLv33mth
2024-08-04 04:57

Good start, the first 15 chapters are good but you can see that the quality declines slightly as the chapters go on , it's a real struggle to read these interactions with Tenten, these uncomfortable, like those old people from the village who complimented you when I was little , he's an adult in a child's body, he shouldn't have noticed Tenten's beauty like that , see him flirting with her, God, just ewww. I hope the author fixes this , it's really important , the fact that the only description when he notices someone female is that she's pretty is pretty weird , the last chapter is discouraging, the fact that he took a mission without the consent of the Village pourrait consister à une trahison, c'est strict military government, il n'est que de la chair à canon , he is quite idiotic and thoughtless . I'm afraid that this story will end up becoming like the other story with Shikamaru SI, I have not been able to read more than 5 chapters of each other, please author don't spoil this story. If the interactions with Tenten or more precisely the main characters improve, I will return with 5 stars

Naruto : Shadow King

kamidemond
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106 Chs

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Magasu_senpai
Magasu_senpaiLv14

how old was mc before he reincarnation

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Hamtaro_
Hamtaro_Lv1

.....I think you ended up frenching in the middle of the comment.

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Meteormancy
MeteormancyLv1

PLEASE! Please change the main character's name while the story has just started. If you look on the Narutopedia Wiki it shows that there are other members of the Nara clan that don't have Shika in their name. Only the main family's leader and heir have Shika in their name. Please change it while the story is still new. Choose something nice and simple like Kyoya, Koji, or Akira or something. Kyoya is a common cool guy name in Japanese culture and many different anime. Koji is the name of the Japanese god of fire, kitchen, and hearth. Akira means wisdom in Japanese. PLEASE! For the love of god choose a better name for the main character!

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zeypher
zeypherLv14

The plot is followed by a over generous dose of stupidity and plot induced idiocy. The chapters feel more like 1/4 a chapter with abyssal word count. The other doesn't seem to have learnt anything from his previous attempts.

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DaoistDxMgPm
DaoistDxMgPmLv4

this book is on its way to become a banger. another kamidemond W

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malhiharjot
malhiharjotLv3

In the starting story was good but it start getting worse after 25.. how to make good story bad you read it here . Story development is bad ,

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breadsticks
breadsticksLv2

Reveal spoiler

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Mister_Robot
Mister_RobotLv4

The story has too many grammatical errors. Using the 10 Shadows curse technique in Narutoverse is quite interesting. My rating would be higher if there was no unnecessary forced early romance with Tenten and also like any other fanfic transmigrator, he starts advising her and yapping. The same shit can be found in many Harry Potter, Naruto, Black Clover fanfics. Maybe if the author made the story darker than canon, with tension always hanging in the air, this would be one of the best fanfics.

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RroY
RroYLv4

The dialogues are cringe. The author lacks info amd creativity. The only thing keeping up the hyoe of the fic is the og Jjk and Naruto fans wanting to read more in hopes of betterment.

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SuryaputraKarna
SuryaputraKarnaLv4

Author has a habit to repeat the same thing again and again to the point it is irritating. He extends the story for no reason, after saying this fight is going to end he goes on to write 13 more chapters. And it had the overused sharingan plot

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demigod0414
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Slow pace. Nerfed MC. Hiding true technique without reason. Ooh, forcing romance with fmc. Actually how your old stories.

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