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Alanray64
Alanray64Lv156mth
2024-05-02 13:12

It’s hard to give this novel a fair assessment as it is obviously from a non speaking English writer. My criticism is that the author took no pains to seek a proofreader to assist him with this and instead relied on translated words which as we all know, does not give a fair result. A comment about his use of the word retard was used instead of regressed and his explanation was the translation had it as that. I found this novel a little to far fetched, more a wish fantasy if anything, everything just gets handed to him on a silver plate. I felt no connection to the Mc and in fact found him to be tiresome and to childish to take seriously. The novel appeared initially interesting however after trying to follow the story and combined with the terrible sentences/grammar, it died a quick death in my mind. Only advice to give is as mentioned before, proofreading is urgently required and then check again. Just wasn’t worth the time.

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Sim_Um
Sim_UmLv14

is this harem? I hate harem so I need to know

Sug_Madic_xx2:actually, I have, just now, rewritten chap 7- 10, I don't know if is still bad or not, but if you still have some time, and you still have the mood to read it, please read it.
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Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2Author

actually, I have, just now, rewritten chap 7- 10, I don't know if is still bad or not, but if you still have some time, and you still have the mood to read it, please read it.

Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2Author

not rewrite actually, just fix some Grammar

Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2Author

i'm sorry bro.

Sim_Um:is this harem? I hate harem so I need to know
Sug_Madic_xx2
Sug_Madic_xx2Author

it's not big, maybe just 3 or 4, he needs it

Sim_Um:is this harem? I hate harem so I need to know
Sim_Um
Sim_UmLv14

Thank you for the answer.

Nwosu_Chidozie_1644
Nwosu_Chidozie_1644Lv3

lol 😂😂 he really needs it

Sug_Madic_xx2:it's not big, maybe just 3 or 4, he needs it
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Crycks
CrycksLv14

I dropped at 8. Cant keep reading with such quality. Dont want to drop a bad review so just writing this here.

Sug_Madic_xx2:actually, I have, just now, rewritten chap 7- 10, I don't know if is still bad or not, but if you still have some time, and you still have the mood to read it, please read it.
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