Review Detail of Willem_Trialmont in Naruto: The Grey King

It isn't the worst thing I've read. What it is, is a cringe inducing experience. The characters are... there I suppose, sort of. I'm unsure how to describe it. It reminds me of a child playing make believe with their toys. The toys look like the characters, but the words coming out are nonsensical, strange, not right. Character development is nonexistent, the characterization of already existing characters are wrong. You jump all over the place. Also, if after writing a line of dialogue you feel the need to make an author's note that says:"What the F am I writing?", you should probably rewrite that line of dialogue. Same goes for the "Cringe" author's note.