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2019-02-16 01:45

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sdwilliams619
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To start out, i'm sorry for the harsh rating because I really don't hate this story. It's an interesting concept but I don't think you've explored fully. Lets start with the MC. I know she likes her ******* and she had a ****ty past, okay fine, but who is she really? What are her likes and dislikes? How does she feel about her current situation? How is she adapting to her new body? Did her new senses overwhelm her at first? How did she handle raw meat? Is she afraid of this new world even while happy to be away from her old one? Is she bothered by the lack of modern conveniences? How did she feel during her first fight and kill as a wolf? I want her to be happy but I feel as though I will never know if she is because it doesn't come across well in your writing. As for my other issues, for starters l won't comment on the story because there is not much there yet. I'm sure you have a plan for it so i'll leave that be. The problem is the world building. I feel like she was just plopped in this new place and she just blew it off. What does the world look like? Is it a cold or hot place? Is it a beautiful place or is it dark and scary? What does it look like? What does it smell, sound, and feel like? To be fair I don't know much about the world yet because the MC doesn't, but there is still a lot you can get across with her senses, even just what she sees would be more than what we have now. My last problem is a bit nitpicky I admit. I don't really like the time jumps. In my personal opinion they take me out of the fantasy of it and make me very aware of the fact that i'm reading a story. I just feel that you could have done something with that. Maybe use it to get a feel for her new body and how to run with it, maybe get across the feeling of her getting stronger by going over her last kill in her head and how she handled it, basically introspection. They don't have to be that important, but if all you want is a scene transition I just feel that there are better ways. Again I feel that I have to stress I really don't hate this story and i'm not trying to pick on you. You have a really good story idea but I think it's just not explored very well. Anyway I hope this helps.

Lazzyname
LazzynameLv14

I’m sorry that I can’t give this one a better review, if certain things improve in the future then I may update it. But here’s what I’ve got: Good things: honestly the premise of the story is the biggest bonus and it’s the thing that has me continuing on despite the flaws. I greatly enjoy having a strong female lead and love the video-game like leveling system. Another pro is that around 60 chapters in it still isn’t a stereotypical romance novel. Could use improvement: the biggest flaw in this novel is honestly the writing quality. It’s pretty clear that the author is a novice writer with a plethora of poor sentence structures, lack of quality editing, and some issues in maintaining believable dialogue. The second biggest flaw is that the main characters seems to loose their strength when they group together. When the FL was alone she showed strength and the ability to reason, but when she joins others her personality becomes solely a traumatized woman who doesn’t want to open up to the world. When she does have a breakthrough it happens so suddenly that it doesn’t represent a realistic growth. I would recommend that the author trust themself more about how the characters would act. Even if the readers don’t like a particular character and you need them to leave they should do so without going against the pre-conceived personality and party dynamics. Basically this story has some potential but needs help in the writing quality and the character development. If those two things happen I could see this becoming a great novel because the premise really is quite good. So I hope that in the future I can update this review and give it more stars.

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