thanks for the chap

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nga what

PEAKK

ORV reference

tftc

thanks for the chapter

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This is my second review ! I just caught up and I'm so glad I read this. Even though it has a small amount of chapters at the moment, the scenes, character interactions, build-up are perfect. I actually quite like Aoife and Julien's interactions. I've gotten pass the weird halts in paragraphs, and I actually quite enjoy it now. I did say that it was a sad attempt at suspense but the more I read, the more I feel that I am proven wrong. The plot is well done and I can tell the author has big plans for it in the future. The protagonist is well written. He has a personality and not quite like the self insert ones. He's humorous and vulnerable which is a perfect mix. Though it is obvious that is not like the original Julien. Julien's progressions is always a painful read. Not because it's crap but rather because I sympathize with him. It must be insanely painful to experience others' severe emotions. Even I couldn't handle emotions such as grievance. That's it for now. I'll keep up with this novel as much as I can (Every two weeks, I mean lol. I like to stockpile a bit.) I do wonder though if this novel is contracted.

thank you for the chapter

Perhaps it is missing the word "time?" Making it, "I don't have time to clean up." It still works, technically but seeing the context, the latter fits more

Thank you for the chapter

Wonderful pacing

It's all good. It doesn't make your novel any less of value

Ah, alright. I'm used to western writing styles so I found it out of place.

Good chapter.

Better to use a comma here rather than a period. One shouldn't use a linking verb on the beginning of a sentence.

It's rather odd that a lot of paragraphs are barely whole sentences.

Good Lord. Please fix these weird halts

Along with the two upper sentences, those could've been one whole paragraph... If this is an attempt of suspense, it's not that well done.