cosmicslime

Close.

That's still being decided..........

The premise here is interesting and the set up around peter and the whole academy is decently being built up. The standout point here is how they actually seem like relatable 13 year olds.

Italics would be good for these.

The premise of the story isn't really clear for the first few sections, but the narrative clues were engaging enough to grab attention. Also when voicing the MC's inner thoughts, try spacing them out so they don't get jumbled in with other paragraphs. Like this: (Where am I?") Instead of: There was no one there.(Where am I?) He slowly rose from the bed.

"Nothing came to mind'

This feels like a self discovery novel, and from what I've read so far it comes off pretty well, the thoughts of the main character were clearly being conveyed but, unless I' missing something the MC's name was missing for a good bit. With some clarity in the dialogue, this should get better.

A good romance novel. Although the entire matrimony part starts it off a little strong, there was some genuine buildup here and it feels like the wider world is just waiting to be explored. As long as you watch the pacing this will only continue to get better.

Yes explanations will come later down the line.

Sure, whats your series called?