Parnellis

Keep it going, although be mindful of mistakes.

The writing quality is very satisfactory, the usage of words are exceptional although quite a number of them seems to be gramatically incorrect. The stability of updates is considerably slow for a second chapter that only lasts a few hundred words, but we'll have to see. It's the Story Development that I can't comment on, I have yet to see an actual development but there has only been 2 chapters published so far, so once again, we'll have to see. The Character Design is very generic, nothing too special. There has been a minimal amount of character interactions both between the characters to reader and a character to another character. World Background is not yet to be described in detail, the only thing I've seen so far is that it just seems like a modern setting.

> he could had thought probably it a unique cave but seeing this I don't know what are you trying to convey, but it is definitely not gramatically correct. Minor mistake but can be overlooked.

Even if you're going to do it this way, please do it at the end since people will definitely confuse this with the actual story

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Single short paragraphs like this should be included in another long descriptive paragraph. you have multiple long descriptions, maybe try adding the short paragraphs to them sometimes.