Hi there! Thanks for visiting my page! My name is Chaotic Sunshine and I Romance stories. I love black cats and love walking my dogs on the beach.
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Sorry, please tell me to stop if you don’t want me to check things like that
A great chapter! I like the banter between the friends! I would just just the grammar to help the flow of your story.
Full stop inside speech marks. “What you saying? I know.”
Check you sentence here. It needs to be broken up a bit. How could he be so cruel as to leave me for someone else? I didn’t realise that I was sobbing until a little girl came and wiped my tears away. She bent down and whispered something in my ear…
Friends do feel awkward in this situation!
The way you capture emotion is really amazing.
Just check your grammar on this line. The speech marks are in the wrong place.
Yes, yes you will !!!
Oh my goodness, you manage to capture emotion so well. It is like that, everything reminds you of them!
Love the first chapter, really pulls on the heart strings. I would just check the editing on one or two parts. :)