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0Mashroom

0Mashroom

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Your typical writer, who is also addicted to reading light novels and webnovels. chat me up if got something to complain or to chat with. Discord: Z3ro#3312

2021-11-21 BeigetretenPhilippines
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  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
    Antwortet auf McWms99

    Appreciate your thoughtful review, currently, I'll be taking this book for a break/pause to fix some of its problems. just like you and others mentioned. hopefully, you find this book enjoyable in the future.

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  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
    Antwortet auf Demons_and_I

    thank you for taking a look at the story. the advice you give me, i'll try as much as possble to fix some of them. not really confence with gramar skills but will try [img=recommend]

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  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
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    The plot as far as I have read is great. Can't wait to find out how Cain and Ashur are related to each other when I delve further. If I have to say my piece, there was a few errors but its interesting overall. I wanted to give a 4.9 review rating but it always went to 4.8. Either way the story is good ignoring the minimal errors at first so I think the 5/5 is okay. So far this novel does not seem to bore me, there were a few errors but it's interesting. the plot is great altho not much I can say about the daily updates tho..... characters are fantastic I wonder if Cain and Ashur are related or brothers perhaps. anyway I give this read a 4.0 / 5 good one author [img=update]

  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
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    Yo this novel is my cup o tea ngl. im sucker for simple old slice of life stories with no drama. just wholesome. the writing simple and easy to unserstand. bais gramar is ok. story itself is kinda fun and entertaining to read man too bad its short hopefully this het more chapters :( over all i give story a personal 6 cinimal rolls of sweet over 10 it got somw flaws but a still good read nice work author [img=recommend]

  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
    Antwortet auf FA3zy

    i'll keep that up

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  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
    Verschickt

    I'll say this first your writing need some impovent,tbh I really like how this story like movie script. the story itself is good I like how mature and mystery that I'm getting from the few five chapters. the world background is kinda nice to know that there small details consider like the character and the world around them. overall my tip is that improve writing and editing cause sometimes dialogues are confusing.

  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
    Antwortet auf ThePotatoKing

    Thank you for the honest review, I'll be making sure to fix them. the red hood and Jocker dynamic is really entertaining for me to write, hopefully, you enjoy more chapters in the future.

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  • 0Mashroom
    0Mashroom2 years ago
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    Have read 5 chaps of this novel. first I like the mc his very smart and has some sense in him to other stories that have a similar concept to this who had characters who are ignorant and cocky the authors say it is part of their charters but when it comes to the end of their stories they didn't even change. Okay the writing needs some improvement when it comes to action scenes sometimes it feels short and lacks some, I'm not saying that your writing is bad, and your grammar is alright but in case of miss typos recommended for you reread the chap before uploading. The story got some lore I'll say that the world-building is still confused about what setting this takes place idk probably just me, I might read more chaps to fully grasp what's going on. but overall a good read for killing time