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Sal_TarLeen

Sal_TarLeen

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2021-05-18 BeigetretenGlobal
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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    I started reading and found myself at chapter 7. It truly captured my attention. Henderson is disgusting, I hope Cassey does not grow up like him.

    THE PASSION AND CRIME
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    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    I won't let you wonder for too long 😉

    Ch 5 Chapter 5 - Cheap
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    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    I love the story. Lisa is more frank than I expected, I like how clear the characters ideas are shown and the fast pace of the events. Shane seemed dark for real though. but Lisa should be wiser for her age, Lol

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    An interesting idea, and a strange plot so far. I think the paragraphs need short sentences and one can use the word (one) instead of he/she. Maybe you can add a bit of emotion to the characters in their time of crisis or when making hard choices. But so far, it's great on the science side, just try to put it in shorter sentences so the concept becomes clearer for your everyday readers. Go on!👍🏻😃

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    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Antwortet auf glass_explosions

    thanks for the advice ☺️. Really appreciate it

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Antwortet auf UpSide

    thank you 😊, I will!

    Ch 4 Chapter 4 - Cold
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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Kommentiert

    somehow I like this cold, mysterious setting. the description is great.

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    told myself he's noble to the core

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    I want safety for everyone too 👌🏻😌 that's noble

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    I really like how fluently you draw the scenes with your words. It seems interesting at first sight. I'm gonna read a few chapters more

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Antwortet auf UpSide

    it's indeed a somewhat religious story, however the focus won't be religion in a way. Jacob is indeed installing good morality into his child. he had done so with his children. but don't rush events. we will see what happens next

    Ch 2 Chapter 2 - A Forced Leave
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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Antwortet auf Bella_Jackos

    thank you! I will update today or tomorrow 🌹😃

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    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Antwortet auf Account_nolonger

    happy you got the feelings I tried to embody in my words, wait for more 🥰😉

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    Sal_TarLeen1yr
    Antwortet auf Dreamerx30

    thank you very much 🥰 I hope it reaches out to all🌹

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    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    I love karma

    My heart skipped a beat, what have I done, because of my stupidity I brought a wild wolf with me, and now fearing for everyone's life, I have to obey him!
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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    regardless you should have listened to your father. or you will be in trouble 🤣

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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    nor stupidity suits you

    "Anger doesn't suit you!"
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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    love this name!

    Mrs. Thompson went to her room for rest and I was going to do the same but suddenly I remember that I don't have a name to call him and neither he remembers it. So I decided to come up with one and named him "Nate"
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  • Sal_TarLeen
    Sal_TarLeen1yr
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    thank you 😊 I will work hard

    Ch 1 Chapter 1 - Big Dreams
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