I loved the vivid descriptions of the protagonist's surroundings, and the atmosphere of dread that the writer managed to evoke. The language was evocative and drew me into the story, making me want to know more about the protagonist's journey. There's a good balance between the action and the atmosphere, which makes the passage compelling. I think there are a few areas which merit further exploration: 1) The passage could benefit from a more vivid description of Jinzo's emotions. His thoughts and feelings should be explored more in order to allow the reader to connect more deeply with the character. 2) There is a lot of action happening in the story, but it could benefit from more details in order to create a more immersive experience for the reader. 3) The setting and the environment could be further fleshed out to add more depth. The descriptions of the flora and fauna should be expanded upon in order to create a more vivid picture for the reader.

Overall story is really nice, i hard a hard time trying to read and understand most parts cause of the grammar. Also are the asterisks really necessary even after categorising it as R18? In my opinion, it's not.

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

Thank you very much!

if I could rate world background 10 stars, I would. The author really took his time to describe the world, and the writing is very good😭😭😭. the plot is amazing I want to see where this lead to.

a beautiful start

beautiful, you don't seem like a novice writer, this is truly beautiful,I have read other novels like this, but I feel like the gore in the novel makes it seem less cliche, the overall plot is good, the character description is Wonderful. can't wait for your next update

it is truly a beautiful ending

😭😭😭😭😭😭, this story is niceeeeeee,

oof💀

lol, is it just me who feels like this is a JoJo reference

lol, thank you but this book is up to like 27 days. hehe

I really love the plot, the names be cracking me up like "nylon"😭😭😭. his parents did him dirty giving him that name tho. the book is overall lovely.

every time I see the name nylon, I can't help but laugh🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

lol