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- manish_tiwari_3119a day agoAntwortet auf TheNobleLion
Where did you read the raws? Name of the website ?
- manish_tiwari_31192 days agoAntwortet auf User_Name_Triple
See and reply to my review please
- manish_tiwari_31192 days agoVerschickt
I think you writing level is good, the story has potential. What I would say is usually in rebate or novels like this we see MC get rich and then progress in life. Here he got money but he so scared that he didn't even buy house. He could buy a house in the girl name for big rebate. Like he can buy a building and construct a pub, but having other assets is a risk? I hope this points out the issue, I would prefer if you could stop this again and again with government threat of having them on his back.. he drives a good car own a building and bought a Lamborghini for a girl but can't buy assets for himself. This logic is a little half based. Also he got good memory skill so he can study again (like you mention in the start what he was thinking to do) here you can add a college part and younger women. (I have read till ch 71, would keep reading but this stuff pointed above annoys me a little. Please try to change it)