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Griffboy

Griffboy

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2020-12-23 BeigetretenUnited States
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  • Griffboy
    Griffboy3yr
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    Also the overuse of exclamation marks is unneeded. Honestly you only need one or two to convey your point. If you still don't think that one or two exclamations is enough you can all cap sentences or just words.

    This is something like a draft, it is very possible that there are some errors and if you can please let me know to fix them.
    altalt
    Harem king System
    Anime und Comics · Lazy_writer
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  • Griffboy
    Griffboy3yr
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    I pray that you stop spacing the characters dialogue so much with .... it really disconnects sentences and conversations the characters have.

    This is something like a draft, it is very possible that there are some errors and if you can please let me know to fix them.
    altalt
    Harem king System
    Anime und Comics · Lazy_writer
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