I think the short story's concept is good, but in my personal opinion I'd definitely prefer something similar to your first book ^^

No worries, take your time..! :)

Pretty basic chapter, but it's a good set up for what's to come :)

Void, huh..? haha just kidding, but the intro is pretty good..! :)

alright I thought about it, but probably a reference at best haha 😅

Just kidding though haha, but the idea of short stories can really work well..! :)

between us I mean.. 😛

Ohh I see, well I hope you're enjoying what you're writing, (crossover story between ? 👀) haha 😅

Sounds good, are you going to write there?

Haha, I was thinking about it 😅

its been awhile. I was very busy with other stuff, I gotta get back to writing 😅

Yup this is completely different from your other book haha

Yes, and getting inspiration from other media also might help! [img=Feeling it]

Ohh, this looks interesting . Gonna keep on reading and compare it with your other book, already very different to say the least haha

No worries take your time lol

There's nothing uploaded ?

Sure thing, haha, no worries! 😅 I'll be sure to be aware when you upload it!

yeah I'm not trying to make them overly over powered from the get go.. 😅

Also I really like the concept of choosing your own ending, but i gotta know which one is cannon however haha

Alrighty, for your first novel, this is pretty good! I'll admit, there are writing errors, but that's to be expected and which you can easily fix. I definitely felt like some parts were dragged out for way too long, and naming one off characters only to be killed wasn't exactly necessary either. But there are definitely interesting ideas you managed to create, 'the entity' can easily show up in any of your other stories should you decide to create any. I personally feel like being a cosmic being unable to physically change the world, but influence is an idea I like very much. You can practically make your stories connected somehow, or at least reference this story within your other future ones. Overall, for your first story, it's okay, there are ideas that work and you should develop more. Also tone down the grim dark stuff next time, admittedly that might make people to stop reading entirely and drop your novel.. 😅