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Please correct this paragraph it's weirdly written
Author! I just wanted to know will he have a fleet ? and will he interact with the straw hat in the future? and all of his girls are loyal to him right?
Don't say it as if it's a matter of fact when you don't, we simply don't know and eternal love may exist, love come in many form so don't say things as if your opinion is the truth since it is nothing more than your opinion and only your opinion on the matter and don't push into others
No, It doesn't make sense even in that way because what you most likely are thinking about is a parody -> imitation that has no link to original work and if anything I think he meant Hokage but got things mixed up or is just high on drug since it doesn't make sense and Hinata only belongs to Naruto
Who know's?
Coming from him I expected more did he forget that he died and was reincarnated? seems dumb to read this when you know of this also when will you update your other stories?
Nice going, then if for this one you do change the point I showed into something more natural with her not loosing memories and them developing their relationship steadily it would be great and please let me know when you do so, it's better to fix some point early on in the story rather than write and come back later to fix so a tip would be that when you start writing chaps for this one again you “overhaul” before continuing it
It was only my opinion, for example your mha fanfic is dope for now and I don't see any problem with it, it's just that I expected too much from this one since avatar fanfic is rare but it was only that part I told you about that ruined it for me could have been handled better and still can be if slightly changed
This is only my opinion, so at first I was extremely hopeful for this but in the end it didn't go the way I hoped it would, for example it went downhill at the part with his motheer I don't like the relationship you made them have it feels forced and too fake I had so much expectations for her that it destroyed most of the enjoyment, I hoped to see her with her memories trying to redeem herself by working extra hard and being by his side and slowly see him as a man and falling for him slowly would have been so much better
Can someone reply? I actually was waiting for chapter to pile up and only saw now that it ended but then I saw some review about ntr and wanted to know what's the deal? like is ciri or someone else forced into something? who he end with ? and is it really ntr or is it girl of his harem having *** between them? depending on the answer I'll know whether to continue or not this
Author, I feel that this line destroy his character somehow it made him fall in my ranking, I mean even as a joke brothers or friend don't say things like that right? this feels off somehow I don't know why will you edit this?