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An0nymous1yrAntwortet auf Leavemereado7
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Everything changed when the fire nation attacked
The world has changed. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf Dragon_Lord_KuroII
thanks! I'll sure try!
"If you're not gonna get what you want, then I will bring it to you." Hiroto said with a smirked and disappeared into the shadows. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf AnteChao
I just edited the parts before the time dilation, I'm so glad that I at least improved! I mean it when I say thank you so much! I usually don't get replies especially stuff that'd help me improve so I'm sure this will be a great motivator for me. Have a nice day or night haha
Amber is a pure demon, apparently, she got captured by some noble demon who tortured her until the king Rex stepped in. She was in so much stress so became a pure demon... I wish I could've helped... - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf AnteChao
Honestly, I agree with you there. I need to get better at not making things confusing, it can be very frustrating reading that. If you don't mind, I have a question, is the first 3-4 chapters better than the later ones? I edited it and I wanted to know if it's still as flawed
Amber is a pure demon, apparently, she got captured by some noble demon who tortured her until the king Rex stepped in. She was in so much stress so became a pure demon... I wish I could've helped... - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf AnteChao
Thank you for letting me know. I can see the problem you mentioned too and I'll try my best to improve on that! I'm sorry you feel that way, I still have a lot to improve on so I'll consider this every time I write. Thanks for the compliment on the plot and I'll definitely practice making everything feel less forced :)
Amber is a pure demon, apparently, she got captured by some noble demon who tortured her until the king Rex stepped in. She was in so much stress so became a pure demon... I wish I could've helped... - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf Ryo_KamiCh 17 Power 9s
- An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf Energetic_Beet
What's that?
Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen. - An0nymous3yrKommentiert
Too relatable
"Finally!" Tari said stretching her arms over her head relieving the tension her muscles from sitting for 2 hours straight. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf PlatinumNight
must be one amazing person XD thx for reading!
He's right... why can't this just be generic? Isn't that the whole plot suppose to be filled with cliches? I know if this is actually fictional I'd be breaking the 4th wall and I'd love to do it again, but I just can't imagine who would read/watch this crap. Must be one amazing person... - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf PlatinumNight
xD may the tale of the pebble live on
Alright, pebble of pig smiting... I choose you! - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf PlatinumNight
ayyyyy I see you are a person of culture
Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf psycho_squid
hell yeah XD unfortunately didnt have blond vampire and bunny girl when they got out of the cave
Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf azrail_nailo_6
No... bet that's an inconsistency... thanks for pointing it out!
Description: Amber in her old world was a beautiful crimson red-haired girl. Her eyes were pure Amber. If she puts up the act, she can be the embodiment of a princess. Although, she finds it annoying to put on any facade all the time. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf azrail_nailo_6
haha spot on
Dieser Absatz wurde gestrichen. - An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf JustMeHereBored
- An0nymous3yrAntwortet auf Sage_GeorgeCh 4 Blinding Light