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The way they are speaking feels like they are robots. People in office talk normally but with respect, not like some type of chat gpt thingy. Is also a problem for you author because you lose the chance to give them original characteristics to each character making them more real. Also instead of expressing every feeling with dialogs sometimes i better to describe the body language only. Last thing. You are writing in first person, so is not good to change povs to other character, the beauty of first person, is that we the readers learn with the mc, making things more mysterious. And you author having an easier time making plots, personality and showing the thoughts of the mc. Sorry for the criticism, i really like the story i think it has a lot of potential. I would hope that he didn’t have an AI that will steal a lot of scenes and chances to enrich the story. But the whole Internet thing is great.
Please stop writing dialogs like a script format. This is a novel, use proper labels and writing dialogs. Use “ “. instead of : If you have problems describing who is speaking just write he said, she said or the name of the person. Is boring to write but we readers won’t really notice in the flow of the story. Instead of you writing, Carlos: hello how are you? like script, you could go Carlos said, “hello, how are you?” if not it cut the flow down. Also not to insult, but when writer do that it reeks of lazyness.
Only in countrys with bad food laws.
Snakes fans need to touch some grass.
Like the force? literally just blame it on the force? like…
ice on beer?
Sorry man but i refuse to donate to a GpT story.
I swear people act as if we asked to be born or something. Most parents have kids for selfishness. If they were really that bothered to make the world better they would have adopted. You don’t owe what you didn’t ask for.
Just no so early in the story. I don’t know of a single one who didn’t become awfull after the kids.
Midnight in paris is great.
Back in the day people hated Keanu. Like there wasn’t a day that they didn’t insult him.
From the misogynistic brand favored by men with fragile egos? I 100 percent would expect it 😆
I mean. A stylist who uses dolce is not someone you want anyway.
This story feels more AI generated by the day.
Challenging moment? You have a system that tells you everything...