Straight thought he was Going to dc thEy haVe a known portal between the worlds

gathering event this* evening

So im guessing This book dIed its a shamE realy good start

appreciate the input i'll try and do better next chap

yes but the mc is still twelve and I'm thinking of making more of really angry hero or anti hero

*by a pop up message

feel free to keep proof reading and call out any other mistakes you find i re read most my chapters but because i wrote it alot of the time my mind just inserts whats supposed to be there not what is

thanks for bringing it to my attention ill fix

i think that is where im going to go with this multi person might switch to different perspectives at a later date dont know if im going to have them fight or team up as of yet though

i will try to get better at it was it the grammer or just a overall confusion in the chapter?

how so ill try and fix bad grammer or just confusing?

Good job

Decent Enough storyline but i think you should re write the ninja stuff out keep the Ki theres really no link there and it seemed you Were reaching so u could have cool ninja powers. I also think you should go back through and do another read through A lot of the sentances are confusing making it a hard read otherwise awesome

Did u drop this hasn’t been a new chapter in a while like the story overall not a good guy but not a bad guy don’t make this just a **** story please lol