Plot Development + Character development & Genres

[ READ if you're confused, unsatisfied, upset or considering dropping the story because of the characters ] [ This is clarification ]

This is just to inform you about the development and what I have planned for this story.

(I advise not to skip the story information, just to have better insight about the story) ( And to prevent or clarify any misunderstandings about the story so far )

(This is not a story chapter)

[Slight spoilers to some portions of the story] [ Spoilers do not contain what will happen in the story, just what to expect in the story ]

So far I've been publishing chapter's that each holds their own pieces of the story. What I want to do is have the story chapters consist of one whole story with the same plot.

There will be more adventures, drama, fights, romance, and of course blood and gore.

If anyone is concerned about this and I'm sure a lot of people will be and are, Inanna's body is currently 13 years old in the story so far, yet Ivery who inhabits her body is 16 years old, this story is mainly historical, so my point is in past times it was common and even normalized that girls 13 and even younger than that were able to be engaged and married or in a relationship. Usually, if they came from a noble or royal households, this was the case.

And blatant killing/executions by royalty was also normalized.

I apologize if anyone dislikes romanticizing young teenagers, you can always drop the story or skip a few chapters if you don't feel comfortable reading about Ivery and Luther kissing at the ages of 13 and 15.

I just added in things I've seen in romance genres over the years and implemented them in the story, especially things found in teen romance stories/movies/tv shows.

Luther is currently 15 years old, two years older than Inanna but Ivery who possesses Inanna's body is one year older than Luther.

Since Ivery took over Inanna's body, she's technically 13 again, but if anyone feels uncomfortable with the ages that are set, Ivery and Luther won't be 13 and 15 for long so you hopefully won't feel uncomfortable for too long.

I also want to address Luther's character, so...I created Luther to be a love and hate character or a character that you can like but also dislike at the same time.

His actions will be appalling to most people and I'm fine with that because not many people are in for violence, but I'm not supportive for real world violence, my interests are exclusively fictional violence but depending on what type, because I'm not personally into domestic abuse, or child abuse nor do I support anything involving those types of things.

But I am a sucker for scary/bloody stories, movies, tv shows, etc. I want to use this story to express that interest of mine, unlike my other stories it's impossible to add gore or it would almost ruin the story and it's dynamic.

So I'm sorry if anyone hates the fact that Luther is a killer that takes pleasure in killing etc, and I used many cliches when creating him, including his looks..

And please don't misunderstand why I made Luther '" extremely handsome", I just don't want Luther to be envisioned as a regular or normal person with an average appearance, when I had the story in mind I already had Luther's character set as well as his appearance. And when you think of a prince, you'd envision him as handsome.

Ivery is interested in him because he hasn't done anything for her to dislike or hate him and has only been gentle towards her.

Even if Luther had an average appearance, it wouldn't have changed anything within the story or it's progress regardless.

He won't kill anyone and everyone as the story progresses and this is technically a spoiler but...

Luther's behavior will eventually soften up as the story progresses, as he gets older, is rage and desire to kill will be mostly directed to people who offend him or Ivery in some sort of way. I don't want to turn Luther into some sort of psycho killer maniac that people will definitely hate.

He's also not going to try to hurt Ivery or try to kill her, so please don't get upset about the ML killing the MC if or when he gets sick of her because that won't happen. Neither will he mentally or physically abuse her, that is NOT romance whatsoever.

Luther is more than what the story paints him to be so far, he has a background and a past that the story will tell and explain.

But Luther's character will barely ever change so I apologize if anyone disproves of him.

Instead of writing our ML, Luther to be the cliche nice and extremely gentle prince that's nice to everyone and everything, why not give an antagonist prince the spotlight of being an ML instead? In my opinion, having an antagonist male lead makes it more interesting and fits the horror genre of this story.

I've always rooted for the antagonist type of ML in stories/ mangas instead of the good guy ML just because it's different and more challenging to be with a guy with a different side for a change.

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As clarification for readers that don't understand the story, characters and the plot too far,

Luther is the male lead, sorry to inform people that dislike Luther's character. I dislike harems and love triangles or love squares, etc. Because only one ship will win in the end and it will only lead to displeasure for the readers when their ship doesn't sail.

You can always drop the story if you hate him because there will be a lot of him in the story, since he is a main character.

People will choose sides and would end up being disappointed since Ivery and Luther are ultimately cannon since it's their story.

And then they would dislike Ivery's choice and question why she chose the "bad guy" instead of the "good guy".

There is and will be character development too, the characters will eventually change as the story progresses so if anyone has problems with how any of the characters are now, then maybe the problems will soon resolve when the story has more chapters and evolves the characters.

Just give them time, and I promise they will make changes. They're both teenagers at this point and need time to mature.

At the start of the story how Ivery and Luther interact with each other is definitely not love yet so please don't get the scenes so far confused with romance, it is pure and simple interest and curiosity, nothing romantic blooms between them at that point.

Yes the interactions between them come fast but that's how I want the story to be, so that's how it'll be, sorry if anyone disapproves of that.

I don't and didn't want to drag the story out too much where it will be unbearable for the readers to keep anticipating the romance and it never comes, if I dragged the romance out the outcome will most likely be..

"Where's the romance?"

"Isn't this a historical romance genre?"

"The story has more horror than romance, why isn't it in the horror genre category?"

Etc.

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I try to make these characters as realistic as I possibly can, so I include all of the flaws, emotions, and behaviors that humans have. Especially since the story starts off with young adolescents who are foreign to romance.

Ivery is still young and confused and curious because she has never experienced relationships before and she's in a completely different world that she knows nothing about.

Or she could be disliked because she ends up with "handsome psycho psychopath" that'll kill her.

It's already established that he won't harm her, so that's nothing to worry about. And he's only 'handsome' because that's how I imagined him to be when I was planning this story

I think readers perceive her as "stupid" or "weak" in some way because she doesn't know how to use her new powers yet, and she continues to ask Loki questions about things she's unclear about when it comes to her powers and the world she's in, but for someone who was just transported to another world that has magic, the first thing you would do is ask questions.

In the beginning, she should be weak or at least not as strong as she should be since she's just learning about magic and came from a modern world.

And some readers may think she's stupid because she doesn't kill the emperor on sight, but the thing is...she's not capable of doing that yet. She's still adjusting to the fact that she's a new person, in a new world with magic that she just learned how to use.

And some people may think she's stupid for not running away, she can't do that either, she can't use her powers to the fullest yet, she doesn't understand the world she's in yet, she's deeply attracted to feelings that she's always wanted (read more to found out).

Readers may misinterpret Ivery being with Luther is only because of his appearance, when I assure you as the author, that's not the case, Ivery isn't that sort of character.

She doesn't take the engagement with Luther seriously because she's inhabiting Inanna's body, and it'll be Inanna that has to live with her decisions. And she has no relationship with Xia so she has no reason to not accept her engagement to Luther.

But making rash decisions will only get her killed in the end, but some readers want her to make rash decisions and avenge Inanna who technically hasn't been killed yet.

Readers also may dislike Ivery because she's not OP from chapter 1, or because she's not assertive, I want her to start off weak, I want her to be childish at times because she isn't an adult yet and as she gets older she'll mature like everyone should as they get older.

And these readers must keep in mind she doesn't know how to use all of her powers yet in early chapters like 1-9, she has to learn her powers first to be able to use them, and most of her abilities are locked.

Ivery is not accustomed to living in the world she's in, she doesn't know how to deal with or properly talk with the aristocrats so far. Again, keep in mind that she's not used to having magic or being able to use something that wasn't real in her original world.

There's a reason for everything that happened so far, and if you read...you'll find out more and why and most problems that readers are having with the story or the characters will only be resolved if you read.

I don't know about making many serious criticism reviews about the characters early on in the story, especially if you stop reading around chapters 1-6, which doesn't hold much character development or any at all since the characters are still being developed and they're still young. And chapter 6 is literally where the story really starts, so you'll never get a good understanding of the characters and the story at the point.

When in the latest chapters they're already maturing. So the characters will and do make changes as the story progresses as they get older of course.

But being a writer and making a story means you're signing up for all types of criticism. I'm fully prepared for it, and I try my best to clarify for the unsatisfied readers to the best of my ability. But you can't please everybody, people have different perspectives and see things differently than others.

Some people will like the story and some will utterly hate it, but that goes for almost everything. Some people will like the characters and understand the characters and some people will hate the characters and misunderstand the characters. People have preferences and I won't be able to fulfill all of the reader's preferences, so I can only keep writing what I like to write and hope that the readers like it too.

Overall, constructive criticism of the story chapters is welcomed and appreciated and I will make adjustments depending on the constructive criticism that I receive. But dropping the story over young changing/changed characters, is something I just wanted to address.

If anyone has any constructive criticism for me please let me know in detail either in the comment or the review section, so I know what in the story to fix or revamp.

But blatant hate and rude comments about the story does not help at all nor does discouragement towards the story, such reviews, replies or comments may be removed. I repeat such reviews, replies, and comments may be removed.

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About the overpowering I did with Ivery and Luther,

I wanted to make a story with overpowered characters, I don't really care much if there are people who hate that they're overpowered for no reason and hate that the way they received their powers make no sense. I know how to challenge overpowered characters, so there will definitely be obstacles for them in the future.

Since there isn't much power development needed for the two of them since they will be more overpowered as the chapters go on. I decided to put in dangerous situations or a lot of drama just to give the characters a challenge and test out what they can and are capable of or will be capable of, rather it be a magical challenge or psychological challenge.

The main characters will be absurdly powered to where it may seem ridiculous at times..... so ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ you can drop the story if you want, I can't stop anyone who wishes that, but I do ask for you to give the story a chance, and not to drop it at chapter 6, where nothing has happened yet, nothing is introduced.

And as for the genre's, this story will not include: Harems, gender-bender, Tragedy, Sci-fi, Reverse Harems

This story genres that will be included: Romance, Horror, Magic, Fantasy, School life, Drama, Suspense, Adventure, Historical, Mature, Demons, Vampire, Supernatural

This story's tags include: Strong female lead, Strong male lead, Overpowered female lead, Overpowered male lead, Violence, Royalty, Romance, Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, Magic, Gore, fast romance

This story is not a horror genre with romance it's a romance genre with horror.

I want this story to have depth. Everything I have planned for this story will soon be implemented when I create more chapters.

I am working on this novel/story alone as I do with many of my other stories on different platforms, I have no proofreaders, editors, or anyone helping me with this story.

I usually focus on having the chapter's posted faster rather than finding every single mistake I made, since I write over 1000+ words I usually don't catch every mistake and I tend to overlook them, so grammar errors are bound to be found in some or most chapters. So I would appreciate any constructive criticism to help me improve the story, I also don't mind any recommendations that I could add into the story, like custom bonus chapters or new ideas for a chapter or new ideas for the story.

Like I said previously, I don't mind negative feedback at all, so don't hold back! It lets me know what I've done incorrectly and fix them.

I'm not aiming for the story to be professional and it's nowhere near a professional piece, I am still a young inexperienced, aspiring writer and I choose to write stories like this as practice and as a way to express my fictional fantasies.

This story was something that just came to me and I have many more story ideas still being planned that I don't mind sharing and writing someday.

I am always reading any comments I get! Even if I don't reply in time, or at all, just know that I've still read your comment and I deeply deeply appreciate them all. Leaving comments are very motivating for me to continue working on this story, it either lets me know that I'm doing something right or wrong.