To be honest, this novel deserves better, or at least, more than these mere lousy three stars.
I have to admit that the grammar on this nover is good, if not better than the average novel that you would see
on Webnovel. I assure you that this novel has a very little grammatical error, if it has one, I doubt it will disturb the
reading experience. Well, so, why three stars? Well, confusion, confusion was the main reason. Maybe I can fix this review after
the author updates more, but for now, it is just the way it is.
Well, for starter, I still have difficulties in finding the plot point. I meant, the synopsis describe about the main character finding
something that would uncover the secrets of her parents that I, personally, haven't care about either. But well, it will be lampshaded along the way
I think. I thought it would start at chapter 3. Not to be confused with Chapter Three. However, well, it didn't, I kept reading, however, I only found
out that the chapters were full of exposition. I couldn't describe how detailed the surroundings of the story to the point where the details could be deemed
unnecessary. It's like reading a textbook. Textbook of exposition, the author sometimes has a tendency to describe things too much in a short period of time, for
example, a paragraph. In short, too much telling, too little showing. I meant, it could be more interesting to know the MC through some of her action instead of just telling it out loud.
For example, instead of telling "Raiden was an expert at hiding her emotion," just describe how her face looked like when she heard that she was admitted at the academy.
I bet it would be more interesting that way.
If not a dialog, the author usually describe something in a very very long paragraph and this is when I was reading on a computer. I just couldn't tell how jarring it would be for the smartphone
user to read that long expositional narrative that could be described as some information which is important, but placed at the wrongest of time and place. For example, the author told us that the location
of the academy was in the mountain and located far away from the civilization even though the MC hasn't even arrived at the academy yet. This was one of the examples of it. I just couldn't read it, oftentimes, gazing
over it would work too and the details of the information wouldn't be lost since the relevancy of the said information was usually thrown out of the window soon. As long as you remember the name, you are good, that's just
how much unncessary information in this book is. Of course, if you forget it, don't worry, the author will explain it again inside of the next chapter so you don't have to worry about the feeling of missing out some of the vitals
So... you might also be confused by the shifting POV in this story without any warning before hand (Please don't put X's POV or something like that). Well, I think there are two main characters, well, more than two I think. Damien and Raiden. Well
you can go figure since the main character was introduced in Chapter One (Not to be confused with Chapter 1). It's not really that easy to describe whether this story is a closed or omniscient third person. However, no matter what the POV is, it's just that. It's just confusing.
And the confusion kept going on and on. I hoped the author could fix this in the future. Well, I won't put much faith on that to be honest. Too much characters that were introduced at once didn't help with that issues either.
Well, overall, a decently written story, but you need a very high suspension of disbelief to read this one since this is your average teenage story. Hmm, I supported this author. I knew she could write better, however, that potential hadn't been released yet considering how many books she
has written, but those books had a low amount of chapter in Webnovel. Well, I would say that fixing this book would make it better. At the very least, I wanted those things that wer