LittleApple
Update stability and story development saved the rating from 1 * pathetic grammar, poor quality dialogues, poor quality reasoning in the novel, bad explanations and form, etc. basically, even if you are bored and looking for a fanfiction to read where a lot of wish-fulfillment happens, this isn't something I would recommend. only the amount already written makes it slightly appealing.
Just wondering if you all are reading the same story that I just tried to read? I mean a four or five star review, when you can't even follow the story because of all the grammatical errors. Come on! Dear author, maybe take a moment or two to go over your work. That way you can catch some of these errors yourself. Unless of course you just want to throw words out there. If thats it, then your doing an awful fine job.
Conversation between characters doesnt really amount to anything, info dumps here and there, no clear character development, pacing of the plot and story is really bad, not sure if the MC is too stupid or naive, the interaction between characters are so fake, wrong use of pronouns, errors on grammar here and there. Had a good theme for the story maybe you can reboot it and do proofreading.
Honestly I find the god and mc extremely odd, first of all he's god can't he give the mc a body that won't implode on itself, second the god actually preaches human ideals? What? Also find out what's love? That's so subjective you can ask 2 people in a relationship and you can get different answers. Justice to good and evil? This one I don't get are you supposed to go to a serial rapist and cause someone hit him be like here have medicine and a nice day¿?¿?¿? And after that kill or imprison him cause he rapes people?????? And why give him a fucking panda hoodie? Instead of a bracelet with the same effect? Or a normal shirt?
So I'm at the latest chapter around 368. All I can say is this is enjoyable for a very specific type of readers. The MC goes around catching pokemon (harem members), going through broken time-space portals to new worlds, and kinda just existing there. Now thats just my summary but i'll expand. Writing quality: Its quite good( 1 of the things that keep people reading it) Updates: very stable, 2 chapters every couple days. (the second and main reason people reads it) Story Development: The story has no plot. If u want to read it , keep it in mind that author is not writing a serious story where mc may mature or anything.He is just making mc stupid on purpose so there may be some comedy and life of slice type stuff Character Design: MC is kid the entire time(even 2-3 years passed) he still did not age a single year and lets leave the physical part alone. He does not even mature a bit , rather in thinking he is somehow becoming more stupid. sometimes author make him know the plot of the world he is in, next chapter he wont know it. Sometimes he decides something is wrong and stops but immediately agrees to do himself even when he knows it is wrong. World background: Author is just using established world with hardly any changes with the plot of the worlds it self. Overal 2.6/5: If u want to read it like "My multiverse Trip"( which is basically the same but mc is more smart and that author likes to destroy the plot instead of continuing it by inserting his own mc in that novel's mc place) I would never recommend reading it if u want to read a serious or a more logical novel.
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-grammar error,spelling error character's wrong use of gender (he,hes/she,her) -dont have much problem on the novel other than people not questioning his suit and weapon's ability -its good that the mc suddenly didnt became OP and he needs to strengthen his foundation body and technique -good novel just hope that it wont drop in the later stage
The story is good I like the concept of the MC the problem is the way the MC act is not concise with his background. Imagine an MC who is a lab rat in his previous world and only know Manga and Onepeice as the definition of reality would he trust strangers the first time he met them? Of course not! but this MC is like that he kept telling his Secret left and right and what's more it's annoying how it's handled it's not a bad idea to have a naive and honest MC but common its One Piece World where corrupt marines and pirates rules..It just doesn't make sense at all.. Luffy is the only exception to the rules, and even that his naivety is handled quite nicely.. Anyways I've stop reading for now.. I'll prolly continue if the story becomes interesting later on. Well, Good luck to the author. He will need it as I assume there will be a lot of haters because of how the MC is. But please continue and improve, again Good Luck. 😁😁