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you could probably cut the first part out because it is a copy paste of the last chapter. everything after that is great though. great description of the game up until this point and I like the aggressive MC. adding in the scene with the GOM was a great idea but could you elaborate and add more context with Aomine talking about some of the MC's abilities to the GOM.