Shatteredsoul Series

Firstly, the writing is... not good, and this makes it hard to get a feel for anything else. Sentences feel like they go on forever, and this feeling is worsened by the lack of commas. This makes it tricky to get any feeling for what is said. It also makes the story feel far too fast paced, as things happened one after another with no form of break in the writing. I also noticed the tense of the writing change multiple times throughout.

I don't see to point of having him be a normal farmer and then in the first chapter turn him into a magical prince with the body of a greek god. Feels like cheap power fantasy. It would be better to see him grow gradually, slowly adapting to his new predicament and growing stronger. You can do better, and you will if you keep practicing and try to be more creative with the concept of your stories.

I see a lot of promise in this story. The character goes from a farmer to a magical prince thrust into the responsibility of running a kingdom. Since in the past the majority of people were farmers it actually makes sense that a past life was one. That's how I feel about it.

The story has an interesting background, and lots of potential lore to expand on. The main problem is that it’s given away too easily. It might be better to weave information into the story as you go along. Rather than blurt it all out. The plot also progresses too fast. If it’s slowed down, and the MC encounters more obstacles, it’ll improve significantly. The MC is pretty likeable. There are issues with grammar but they visibly improve with each chapter. If you keep the basic premise, and just slow the story down, I can see a great potential new work.

The story is great and the characters developments is good. The only minor problem is about the writing quality but all in all it was good! Also be sure to update daily! Thank you!

The plot of the story is a bit too fast. You can use chapter one to explain how Will works as a farmer. It's fast enough for me. Apart from that, I had to read it twice enough to understand the content of the story. Even though it didn't satisfy me in the end, I'm sure the author will improve the storyline of this novel.

I think this story is really amazing even i cannot make my own story like your story. Perhaps, I need to learn more and more again, all over is good. Keep writing Author

The book cover and the title caught my attention, reading the first chapter made me want more. please keep updatin. can't wait to read more.

perfect world built although story is just starting but i like where its going, the characters are well defined and author has made the words into imagination keep it up author

I've read a few chapters so far, and can say that the story is good, but not really well developed from the beginning. There is no real lore in it, however, starting from the MC's life after powerups and so on, I can see that it's quite a good idea. Author just needs to work a bit on the development...

I honestly think the story is going too fast, instead of just saying Will was a farmer you could have showed us as readers that he was a farmer doing a day's work when suddenly he was introduced to this new system. This story has potential, I can see it being up there with My Vampire System and Supreme Magus but it needs work. I hope you take my advice to heart. Keep writing!

This story is amazing I myself can't type down something like this .I love the character design the flow, keep it up !![img=fp][img=recommend]