Spirits_everywhere
Not very good to be honest. The main character is a complete idiot, there are so many freaking holes in the plot and stuff missing that should be there. The gacha system is completely idiotic, especially when you could just give him a free roll like once a day or week instead of bullshit quests like 'help your mother pass away peacefully' or someshit. For some reason the system even has a 'lovers' portion which again, is idiotic. His family is really poor, and his father looks super shady, and he's just doing nothing and is ignoring it all. He is a fucking piano grandmaster at a young age due to the system and does nothing to get at least enough money to get a better home for his family. He started reading at like age 2 and started studying a bunch of stuff he will never use, it's just beyond stupid. If you have nothing else to do, I suppose you can try reading it. If you do have anything else to read, read that. Oh yeah he's also 10 years old with no friends being mentioned at all.
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A story with a good concept but meh execution. [>Writing Quality (4/5 Stars)<] - Best part of the novel. Although for OC it would be mediocre, for a fanfic it's not bad. A little dry for my tastes, but overall readable. [>Stability of Updates (4/5 Stars)<] - Not even finished yet so no complaints here, though I did hear that the author focuses more on his other story (the one with that focuses on Deku and friends) so that's a bit disappointing, as I find this one to be better, but oh well. [>Story Development (3/5 Stars)<] - Meh. Although it's a slice of life, it's a little too boring for me. The protagonist never fails at anything he does, and the only lost he's faced thus far was losing a grandmother. I like the idea of Gacha systems and slice of life anime crossover worlds, but this is too dry for my tastes with a lot of forced drama, especially with the blonde girl. She constantly thinks and hesitates because of her illness but the protagonist could just cure her. After all, if he ever needs something, he will coincidentally get it with the gacha, it's what happened with the senzu beans after all. [>Character Design (2/5 Stars)<] - Not a good protagonist for the harem genre. A little too passive for my tastes. Relationships barely progress, and when they do, we are only told these things in a summary, not actually seeing it. The entire relationship of the MC and Shouko was timeskips and him being her friend. I didn't like the chapter of Raku because I'm not here to see the protagonists interaction with other males, but with his harem that the author barely develops. I sincerely hope he doesn't follow the same path his other novel followed by focusing on other characters besides his main ones. Also removed a star for a child protagonist, not what I came for in a harem themed story. Inb4 "DONT THINK WITH YOUR D!!!" Lol. Then why did you write a harem? If I wanted to read about a passive Japanese beta male I'd go read light novels. Despite meeting a literal god and being gifted a system, he was shaking in his boots by mere mortal Yakuza. [>World Background (3/5 Stars)<] - Hardly any detail or information given to the world. Besides there being no magic and there being more females than males, I know nothing else of the world. What is the school like? What is the name of the school? Is it similar to Earth then? The world seemed to be very dry despite being an anime crossover. [>Summary<] - Good idea, not so great execution. Author creates passive protagonists, and personally we have many contrasting tastes, despite that I tried to make the review as logical as possible.
a wish fulfilment fic that is extremely frustrating to read. first when mc need something he will gain it using the gacha, second he have many skil but don't ever try to use them to gain money for his poor family and third and worst of all author started giving harem to other guy, I dont care of he give pc character for these other guy but he give amazing waifus to simple side characters
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okay honest review here. i won't tell anyone to not read such fanfic its there choice but i will warn you, your brain cell will rot. and there is no unique concept here nor a great idea author wants to express. just wish fulfilment of si mp who has to bend the world to fullfill his fantasy instead of trying to achieve something on his own. so your choice. if i offend someone, soory ,but consider what i wrote carefully.
Something to read when you have free time. And for the people complaining about plot holes, that's barely noticable. Honestly, it's just them nitpicking. Having those in a story is inevitable. Anyways, here's my review(Subjective). (I suck at English.) Writing Quality 5/5 - There's barely any grammar errors. Stability 3/5 - There's no need to explain. Story Development 4/5 - Really laid back, nice pacing. Though, sometimes it feels kind of slow, but that's negligible. Character Design 4/5 - Really well done. Except there are some certain incosistences, but that's fine, it's really hard to flesh out characters. World Background 5/5 - You could easily grasp what's going on, not much else to explain.
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I personally like the story, special about the where you didn't make it pokemon catching where every girl fall for MC. I am getting irritated with those kind of fics like can't they think about something without using their lower head. Because of this reason I usually don't read those fics but I have high hopes for this story. Don't let those haters to effect your writing.